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    • Annemieke
      Annemieke SVS OG last edited by

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      Dear all,

      I finally took the plunge and worked up the courage to enter in this months challenge. This is my take on the summer vacation gone wrong. It's just a sketch at this stage it needs a lot more work, but before I get too far into it I would like to ask for your feedback.
      Does the image read well?
      Are the proportions off? I like it to be a bit stylized, but the proportions shouldn't be too far off.

      As I'm new to this, all your suggestions are greatly appreciated.

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      • juliekitzes
        juliekitzes last edited by

        Ha ha ha! I love it. I would give some more expression to the face. Right now it's reading bored and should probably read more sick/pained. I would also definitely use a reference for the toilet and the way she's sitting on it. I love the concept a lot.

        www.JulieKitzes.com
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        • Annemieke
          Annemieke SVS OG @juliekitzes last edited by

          @juliekitzes Thanks Julie. I agree she's sitting weird on the toilet. I did this from imagination but I'd better look up some references. I'll work on the expression as well, looking up references of sick/pained expressions should be fun :-).

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          • Jon Anderson
            Jon Anderson SVS OG last edited by

            This is a neat take on the prompt. I agree with @juliekitzes and suggest you exaggerate the expression. That will help us feel for her more and think, "Please don't get her another."

            instagram.com/jonandersonillu

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            • Annemieke
              Annemieke SVS OG last edited by

              Second try. I adjusted the toilet and changed the expression. Untitled_Artwork 3.jpeg

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