Feedback on recent piece
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Hey all,
I recently finished this piece for an article on 'What if we worked less' - which focused on the 4 day workweek and it's benefits for productivity as well as job satisfaction and general happiness
Anyway the deadline has long since been and the magazine printed but I thought i'd share it here in case anyone had feedback/critiques for me to keep in mind! There's a few things I wasn't totally happy with, but as deadlines are short it's hard to pore over it for too long
Thanks!!
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What I wouldn't give to have a 4 day working week
I really love the concept of your piece, it reads really well and I love your unique style!
I think the only thing I would change is the shape of the tide coming in, it falls just on your dashed line, which I know it's supposed to do to show the change of working day to non working day, but maybe just make those white lines of the tide as bit curvy?
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@hannahmccaffery Tell me about it! In the article it said that if we did work 4 days we'd still get roughly the same amount done, but just all be a lot happier - seems about right to me!
Thanks very much, i'm glad it reads well!! Definitely see what you mean, and you're completely right, I drew the image first then just sort of plonked on the dashed lines at the end so I think more care on that was needed
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@AndyIllo Seems right to me too! Fingers crossed the UK give it a try soon like Sweden did
It's still a brilliant piece anyway, I'm just nit picking really! Really cool stuff, looking forward to seeing more!
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@AndyIllo Your illustration not only looks really good, it also effectively conveys the message of the article (which is crucial in editorial, I understand). Going through the ideation process on a short turnaround must be challenging!
Apart from the curvy line suggested by @hannahmccaffery, I don't really have any other pointers, either. It's working really well.
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@hannahmccaffery Thanks very much!! Nit picking is what I was hoping for so you helped a lot
@animatosoor Thank you too! I always find the idea stage the hardest and most daunting so it's reassuring to hear the message comes aross clearly !
Thank you both!
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This is such a cool illustration. Like the others have said, it really tells a story, and it tells it in an engaging way too.
I love your style and the colours you used. Well done.
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Gorgeous work! I think you really conveyed the message in a creative way. I agree with every one about where the wave line falls. Other than that, I think if the woman was posed so she was floating on her back, with her hands behind her head, it would have had a slightly more relaxing, weekend feel. Right now her pose is propelling her forward straight back to Monday. Just a thought!
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@ShannonBiondi Thank you Shannon! I'm so glad the story comes across
Also i'm glad you like the colours! Usually that's something I am not so fond of in my work but this time I was secrelty quite proud - still yet to see the printed version but hoping it came across as vivid on paper!@TessaW Thanks for the help! You're absolutely right , that would have worked really well
Also would have got around the slightly dodgy leg positioning - great idea!
