Characters for my comic
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@reddprime Another reader late to the party...
I'm really liking where this is going. Once you started posting your characters and panes in color, they really took off. I think your scenes really take off in page 2 and 3. Could you show more of the story with less narrative boxes on the first page. Tricky-but I think it would draw me in more quickly.I'm not sure what the "blue light" is-but maybe I don't need to know yet, maybe that's part of the hook to draw us in.
The large image on the 2nd page looks a little out of color-could the goldfish (Finn?) have more warmth and even a little orange/gold while he's in shadow, to tie the images together?
And I don't think the 3rd page needs the dialog at all-I think your images tell the story.
Keep posting! I want to see what happens.
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@avfarrar This makes total sense! Thanks for the input, it makes more sense than the green light I was using
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@BenBernardSmith Hey! Thanks for the feedback. So the plan is to create some confusion in this panel, why does he look different in from here on in that he did in the previous pages? I want the audience to experience the confusing Finn was experiencing as this unfolded, but it gets explained soon.
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@reddprime I can see you want us to experience the confusion he's feeling, but I would say that I initially thought that the first pain he was feeling was caused by him being hit, so if you want readers to know more clearly the two pains are different, you might want to show that somehow, but still keep some of the confusion. Clarity is important when a story begins or the audience can be turned away.
But up to you! Just some thoughts. Keep up the good work! I look forward to seeing more!
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Hi all, I have been struggling with the next page, I have started and been on it for a few weeks, which feels like an eternity.
So page 4 has Finn waking up after being knocked out. We see the top of the cave he is in, then he sees two characters starting at him. From there, I want to show him sitting up all confused and then, a close-up shot of him trying to figure out what has just happened, how did he go from a fish in a tank, to a fish being attacked, waking up in a cave with these two new characters around him.I would really appreciate some advice on how to illustrate and portray this, please.