5 Sept 2018, 20:04
@yego I like these clouds much more
Hello! also, please give critique
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Hi, Yego! Nice concept! It’s very funny. However, there a few things I want to point out.
- The distance between the surfer and the shark. For me atleast, they look like they’re just swimming side by side because they are so close together with the surfer just ahead by a few feet. Coupled with the shark’s happy expression, the tension is lost. Now, I get that you need to make the shark smilling since this is for a teeth thing but that’s just it. The proximity of the shark to the surfer just makes things less tense. Try putting the surfer further from the shark with his feet mere inches from the shark’s mouth. That’ll ramp up the intensity.
- The surfer’s pale face. I get it that you’d be very scared if you have a shark chasing you but it just not work for the illustration. The surfer’s face just gets lost in all of that blue. It kinda blends in with the background.
I hope this helps!
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Hi guys! Thank You all for your feedback. This is an update based on some of your critique. I'm still not shure about the clouds tho. Not very fond of them.
Hi @nyrrylcadiz , thanks for your input.
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@yego I would not have the clouds but if you look at clouds they tend to much harder than most people paint them and this type of cloud has a big overall shape with defined smaller shapes and the center will be much more opaque because of the thickness of the cloud. I would consider some warmer light around the characters form behind like a sun set with a touch of orange but that is a style choice overall nice piece
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I love the water reflection on the fin and the bubbles in the piece! It really gives the image movement. I agree with others by saying that the skin tone looks a little strange, warmer tones would look a little more natural
️ Amazing work 
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@yego I would move the clouds up and away from the characters. That would then frame the characters in the picture some more. Its a fun piece. I love sharks!
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Hi all! Presenting you clouds in a bit different style. I like it better, what do you think?
@rcartwright , @melinahealy , @Chip-Valecek Thank tor your critique!
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@yego I like these clouds much more
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@yego This is so great. Do you want advice? Don't touch it!
Well, to be true, there's something is bothering me, but is a minor thing. The clouds on the background, two things. First, if you follow the line of the fin (the side that has a cut) it looks like the cloud on the bg continue the line and is bothering me because don't help to pull the subjects apart from the bg, but the contrary. Is bringing the cloud to the front and blending it with the subject. That is the thing I would touch for sure, to move a little the cloud.
The other thing is more like a matter of taste I think. Is the cloud behind the face of the swimmer. Is not like is wrong, but me, personally, would prefer if the face is against the blue or at least not so white. Take down the opacity a little could perfectly do for me. Now the hand has more central role than the face, and that's great if you intended, is nothing wrong. But I feel like an imbalance, like is too much, the hand is rock'n'roll star and the face is buried on the cloud.But again, is great the way it is. I'm just saying what I would touch if the piece where mine.
Great light again, by the way. Do you always use backlight?
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This is so awesome! I love it!
My only critique would be, remove the highlight on the hook and instead put it on the teeth- you know, for a "colgate smile" moment- to really sell the idea of anyone can have a great smile sort of thing XD - 12 days later
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Hi Guys!
Sorry for not responding for such long time. Deadline has come, so I guess that's it. Thank You all for yor help. Below I present to you finished product.
@lady-chamomile thanks for your critique.
@Zombie-Rhythm thank for your input, and yes. I use some backlight in 99% of my illustration -
@yego Wow these look great! You must be so proud
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@yego looks great!
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