Would love a critique
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Hey all! So I rarely get on the forum, and I realized it's such a cool place to have an art community and get critiqued. So I thought I'd post a drawing I did last night and see if anyone was willing to critique this one. I recently went through the perspective class and am trying to work on that.
Thanks!
Raj
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@rajsolankiart I think it is awesome. I would suggest redoing it so you can get rid of the marker look, but that is about it. Or maybe add some details on the ground.
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@eric-castleman ya I struggle with getting my copics to look smooth in large spaces, especially with lighter colors. Thanks!
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Overall I think it looks great. Your drawing style has a great energy to it and I love your linework. I agree with @Eric-Castleman. I think it's fine if it's just a study, but for a more polished piece, the marker texture isn't quite working. Maybe if you were more consistent with the way you apply it on the grass. Perhaps applying the markers so it follows the perspective as well and make the marks smaller in the background and bigger as it comes forward in space. You might want to think about trying watercolor as well, if you haven't yet.
The only other thing I see is the wheels of the train. They look more like pot lids. I know you are stylizing, by I think they could have a little more width.
Really like this and it's the perfect practice for perspective. Well done.
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@rajsolankiart Try using the markers slower to get a cleaner bleed. Takes longer but looks more pro like. Maybe soften your shadows edge for your car too. Looks great though I like it.
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@jason-bowen Nice drawing!
Well, if I were you, I'd add a row of electric poles on the right side, cause I feel this space is empty.
And the worstest part could be the train wheels, but you can fix it, just hiden them inside the train, I meant just the bottom half.Sorry my english.
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@jason-bowen that's great! Ya I'll definitely try to slow down next time around!
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@jose-ramos ya I think you're right about the emptiness on the right side! And my wheels could use some work! Thanks!
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@tessw just recently bought some watercolor material, so I definitely need to try that out! I agree with the wheels needing some work! Thanks!
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This is so cool, I love the color choices and the energy. The marker texture doesn't both me that much but that's just a personal thing. I do think that the car suffers from a few problematic tangents. The wheels are uncomfortably close to the horizon and the top just kisses those clouds and it feels uncomfortable. I think the proximity to the horizon line is also messing with perspective- it makes the car look HUGE. My suggestion would be to move it up farther and to the right a bit so it's overlapping the clouds and not dead center on the page (which gives it a very sturdy, placid feel instead of a dynamic moving action feel). You might play with the angle the car is titled at, the scale and maybe up the saturation a bit? I did a quick mock-up, just playing around.
That's my two cents!
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@withlinesofink That was a good fix. I think he's doing great as I am also practicing perspective but th ecar felt funny to me. I didn't think I knew what I was talking about but your post made me feel better
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I'm doing the perspective exercises too. This looks really good! I need to try some drawings like this to practice. Thanks for sharing!
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@rajsolankiart Working on a smoother surface can help. I like using vellum for markers because it takes just a little bit longer to dry so you can blend a bit more.
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@withlinesofink this is amazing direction! Thanks so much! I didn't notice the tangents until you mentioned them, then they stuck out like a sore thumb haha!
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@marsha-kay-ottum-owen thanks! It's definitely been a process! my sketchbook is starting to get full of perspective practice
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@withlinesofink That's a really good solution!
