Trying to redraw my book dummy. Please take a look. They're on here now if you looked before and didn't see them.

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    These are just rough line drawings but, hopefully can give an idea of my compositions. I have my original and two other possibilities that I have drawn up. Should I scratch them all? Keep one and work on it? I am watching ( actually listening to mostly ...) creative compositions today and have been looking at the perspective and doing some of those exercises. I'm hoping I can learn through these pages because I have been working on it for a long time and want to finish it but I also know that I need to improve in some areas . I would REALLY appreciate your input on how I can accomplish this. Thank you!

  • Hi Marsha,
    I don't see any pictures... not sure if they were uploaded or it's just my computer...

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    @Katrina-Fowler Oh no! I'll do it later.

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    1. original idea


    1. alternate


    1. simplified


  • @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen I personally really like the human character in the first one the best it looks really well done but I like the cow and chicken in the second one maybe just the cow a little bit bigger

  • @ambiirae I too like the 2nd one... Maybe try to make the cow bigger and the writing under the chin? Thumbnail time methinks!

    ^_^ Felix

  • I like the original idea. 🙂

  • I really like the chicken in the 1st image. It has a really interesting shape dynamic.

  • 1st one! The cow is so cool:)

  • @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen I prefer the original idea, I like the dynamic more. The size difference makes it interesting (Will Terry talks about including big, medium, and little objects to help create interest). I also like that the cow on that page leads the reader to look at the other page with her eyes. Nice job. 😊

  • I agree I like the second one. Perhaps it's because of the winding path of the fly drawing my eye over to the right page. Make the Cow bigger so all the elements aren't the same size. Also consider breaking up the text and having 'It's sitting there picking at a long piece of thread' on the right page.

    Well... I also like the original, too. I think it's just that the farmers head is close to the cows butt and the fly is coming out the the cows butt, too. Little weird and I know kids would catch that! LOL

    Watch the farmers arm/neck/shoulder area. Really work out the anatomy here. Great characters.

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    Well, #3 is out 🙂 I guess I still like my original compared to the rest. I definitely spent more time on it. I even did a practice painting.......Maybe I'll post the next page and see what you think of it.

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