Critique would be much appreciated

Adam Thornton 0

Hi folks,

I've just got near the end of this piece and I'd be really grateful for comments. If you have anything constructive in mind, please don't hold back. How do you think it can be improved upon.

Thanks very much.
Adam
(Cambridge, UK)

KathrynAdebayo

This is very emotional. The colors, large empty space and facial expressions convey concern and worry. I really think this is well done and powerful.

Nyrryl Cadiz

@Adam-Thornton-0 Hi! Great piece! The emotions are conveyed effortlessly. My one issue is that the boy in the blue shirt is missing his legs. Is that intentional?

Adam Thornton 0

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Thanks very much Nyrryl. Yes, isn't it funny how, as soon as you post something asking for feedback, you suddenly notice lots of things wrong with it! And I thought I'd looked at it enough - probably too much!

Yeah, the boy should have legs. I just realised that he looks like he's been cut off at the chest! He's supposed to look like he's leaning onto the bed. I think I need to show his back behind him a bit and perhaps do something about how his chest is sitting on the bed.

Also, I noticed that the girl's left arm looks like it's separated from her shoulder. Her left elbow is too far away from her body!

I'm sure there's more.

Thanks again!

Adam

Adam Thornton 0

@KathrynAdebayo Thanks very much Kathryn.