This I my WIP for this month's contest. It still needs some work and the values need to be adjusted, but I guess what I am stuck on is it looks a little boring? I feel like it needs SOME foreground element. But, because of how I designed it the only thing that would really make sense is like a quarter of a kids head- which is weird. Do you agree or do you think it's fine?
Does anyone have any thoughts or suggestions? I ALWAYS under think the design stage and then end up with silly problems like this! I really thought I didn't do that this time. Oh well!
Thanks a lot! Can't want to see everyone's entries
I added a mock up of what the top of silhouette heads would look like, but I am still not sure if it works?
Kim Rosenlof last edited by
@Annaaronson I really like the color palette, the style, and the concept. As far as changing something, it looks like everything is split evenly in the composition. There is an equal amount of space for the child and the goat. Also, the top of the heads of characters is about in the middle of the composition so the top and bottom are about evenly split too. I would crop the top of the image so there is not so much space and emphasis on the letters, since they are not as important as the characters. Or you could even add more space above the characters, but cropping may be easier. I would also fade the letters so they aren't so prominent (you mentioned you need to work on the value, so you may have already planned this). I hope that makes sense. It does look nice though!
@Kim-Rosenlof Thank you SO much for taking the time to give the piece such a thorough look. I definitely see what you're saying about the composition being evenly split. Composition is still what I struggle with most. I am going to play around with cropping it and fading the letters.
I'll post what I do- thanks again!!
Kevin Treaccar last edited by
I absolutely love your color palette in this, which makes me hate my feedback, but the first time I looked at this, I couldn't figure out what was in Albert's mouth. Only when I came back and saw Kim's feedback about fading letters did I connect what's in Albert's mouth to the P in the background.
Maybe there's a way to more easily/obviously connect what's in Albert's mouth to the P he's eating? Maybe the P and the tearaway in his mouth is the only use of that color on the page so it pops and connects more?
That totally changed the context of Amos sharing the apple, making the story funny instead of just cute to me.
Love the story and the color palette. Great job so far.
@Kevin-Treaccar I totally see what you mean! It isn't super clear at first. I love playing around with color so I will definitely mess around with that Thanks for your feedback and kind words!
carlianne last edited by
@Annaaronson I also had the same problem with what was in his mouth, at first I thought his mouth was open. It might help if we see his lips and the paper is mid mouth as well?
But it’s super cute! I love the color overall
Dylan Love last edited by Dylan Love
Thank you guys SO much for all of your help. So- here I cropped the image, pulled back the pinks and saturation so that the only real reds come from the boy, the apple, and the letter. I also added more detail and some other stuff Albert was munching on. Does this seem more clear?
Kevin Treaccar last edited by
Yes, that's much more clear and definitely funny.