Albert - feedback please
This is my work so far. I’ve never done a character design before and I am slowly working through the foundation classes so I am very much a beginner at the moment. I would be really grateful for any feedback on my work. What can I work on? What looks wrong? How can I improve?
(I think he looks bored with the lolly so I need to change the facial expression.)
Thanks for looking.
Sabrina Gosselin last edited by
I really like how you rendered the fur! Yes he does look a bit bored... maybe have his eyes closed "happily" enjoying it?
Janette last edited by
Thank you. I hadn't thought of closing his eyes, I'll see how that looks. I thought the fur would make a nice stuffed toy!
Larue last edited by
Perhaps in the running shot you could tilt his head up a bit and have his mouth open as well with his tongue hanging out to the side and back like he's been running a while and is tired(like a dog) I also love the fur but think if his eyes weren't looking straight out towards us in the first and last illo. (down to one side or the other ) that'd soften his expression up a bit.
Awesome thank you so much, that's really helpful advice. I'll see if I can make some changes. It is nice to be able to get some help along the way.
I have changed the heads on the running and sitting poses. I am really struggling to rework the eyes on the front pose. The second eye is so tricky with the 3/4 angle and I don’t think my drawing skills are up to it yet!
Jeremiahbrown last edited by
I love the rendering! Two things I noticed right away are contrast and silhouette. Change it to gray scale, squint at it, and see how you could make different parts pop more. Right now it seems a bit samey. The silhouette is probably realistic but that can make it a bit blobby and uninteresting. Like "the guys" always say, turn your characters into 1 dark color and work on how to make that silhouette more interesting before falling in love with the details.
Great work! Really impressive fur!
I've heard them talk about the grey scale thing but I had assumed that applied when I put my character in a scene so I would put light character on dark background or dark character on light background. I didn't know I should have applied that to the character design as well. I didn't even consider the silhouette! I haven't done the character design course yet as I'm still working through the basic level classes. Wow there's a lot to think about. I'm pleased to have finished something though!