15 Jul 2019, 22:02
Finished, water was difficult....
English is not my strength, so if the text needs some correction, I am open to any help.
Process on work for my portfolio (ongoing)
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@MichaelaH You can use the joke if you want if you really like it (I don't own humor anyway) and I think this joke has probably been made many times before
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@Julike-Challenge Yeah this was more general question, if jokes are copyrighted...But I like Your joke.
I thought about doing story like the fish(main character) is going around and talking to lot of animals telling the same joke...Mabye one more underwater scene and one similar to bear scene.
Here my value studies
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@MichaelaH These value studies look great! I feel like B would have the characters read most clearly against their background, since they would both be dark against the background which is lighter.
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There is this instagram challange #childhoodweek from 7.-13.July (https://www.instagram.com/childhoodweekevent/ by Beatrice Blue) and I really wanted to do at least one promt, so today (ok saturday, now is already sunday here and i have to go sleep...)
So I did the first promt "Books", as I really liked to read, first books were about Mammoths, wolves, Indians.
I didn't do a value or color study, only teh sketch and goooo color....
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@MichaelaH This is a beautiful piece!
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@MichaelaH This is a really fun piece. I love how the girl is interacting with the mammoth and the wolf. The prompts sound lovely, too! Have fun taking part in the challenge.
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After some days, again working on my fish and bear story. I decied to do only thumbnail values and thumbnail colors and after it I am drawing like usual, with colors on the big picture.
But one thing I found, I can have the same psd file open at the same time (window/arrange/new window "openfilename") and than I set this new window with the same psd file to greyscale (view/proof setup/ working grey or custom - working grey) and am drawing in the second file and see all changes in the grey psd file. So I can check/watch the values through the whole color painting process.
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Finished, water was difficult....
English is not my strength, so if the text needs some correction, I am open to any help. -
@MichaelaH I love the water! Also, all of the expressions are awesome.
As for the text, the double quotation marks (" ") should be placed at the top like this:
"Ohhh, ohhh, you know this one?"
and
"Why don't bears like fast food?
Because they can't catch it!"https://www.instagram.com/sooryajart/
The Beatles: "Roll up, roll up for the Mystery Tour!"
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@animatosoor Thank You, I am glad it looks good.
This quatations marks I have are in german style....in Germany we have them down and up :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_cold_sweat: -
@MichaelaH Oh, I didn't realise! I'm so sorry about that.
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This looks great Michaela, i was looking forward to seeing this finished yay!
As for the text, I don't think you need to say 'the fish with the red fins' as we can see from your illustration that he has red fins
Maybe give them names like Little Fish and Big Bear or something, and I think there should be a pause between when the fish asks the question and then tells the punchline, maybe say something like "Bear started to think, but before he could answer..." so that the Bear is involved and the reader can follow the conversation between the two characters -
@hannahmccaffery Thank You Hannah, really appreciate your help with the text. I will change it.
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@hannahmccaffery What about this?:
„Ohhh, ohhh you know this one?“
Flip din‘t wait for the bear to answer and started to tell its joke:
„Why don't bears like fast food?“Berry started to think, but before he could answer...
„Because they can't catch it!“ -
@MichaelaH That's flows much better in my opinion
You may want to lose the line "Flip didn't wait etc" and maybe have something like:"Ohhh, ohhh do you know this one?" Flip asked "Why don't bears like fast food?"
Berry started to think, but before he could answer-
"Because they can't catch it!" Flip blurted out as he splashed around in a fit of giggles.That's only an idea anyway, I'm not the best at writing so it's totally what you're happy with and what you think flows well
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@hannahmccaffery Thank You, hope it is ok, I will use Your text, I like it a lot. Thank You for your help.
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Fab! Are you happy with it as that's the important thing?
I think the text gives Flip more of personality now and I would love to see more of these characters -
@hannahmccaffery I am very happy with it, thank You so much. Yeah I am thinking about drawing one more picture to this story
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Working on July contest, have two thumbnails
Thumbnail A
Thumbnail B
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Now better sketch finished:
