May FauxContest WIP -- critiques welcome

Miriam · 30 May 2018, 00:26

@jon-anderson Thanks! I appreciate the feedback! I will work on the confused/curious aspect.

Miriam · 30 May 2018, 21:47

@jon-anderson
Ok, here's my attempt at making the one on the right look more curious by giving him a tilted head and raised eyebrow. What do you think?

Jon Anderson · 30 May 2018, 22:32

@miriam That's cute! I personally would try to exaggerate that curved eyebrow a little more. Looking forward to seeing the stripes and spots.

Gary Wilkinson · 30 May 2018, 23:57

I like the concept for the piece, but I feel that you have a few issues with the sketch. The pose of the animals is quite static and lacks energy, their faces are also really close to each other which gives me the feeling that it is quite a confrontational stance. I would suggest to have a more playful pose to show their interest in each other which would also fit within a tight composition (as opposed to the long horizontal one you have here). Here is a picture of some lion cubs that, although isn't perfect, may help you explore other poses to help emphasis the curious element you want to achieve.

Miriam · 31 May 2018, 01:01

@gary-wilkinson Thanks for taking the time to comment and share the picture!

While I was looking at some reference photos yesterday, I started wondering the same thing about the energy / playfulness of the pose. I was also thinking it might be fun if I could have one looking down and the other looking up.

I didn't want to start over for a couple reasons--I chose the long format because I thought if it turned out well, I could print it on a mug for my niece; and if I am going to finish it for the fauxcontest, I need to hurry up! But I think you are right--it would be a better composition if I change the pose.

Miriam · 31 May 2018, 20:31

Miriam · 31 May 2018, 21:15

I'm thinking I should make the drawing a little more cartoon / simpler style to go with the thought-bubbles and humorous aspect.

Miriam · 1 Jun 2018, 17:07

Here' my attempt at using a brush pen. I am very new at using brush pens, so I was pleased with this result, even though there are areas that I'm not satisfied with. It's the first drawing I've been able to finish with the brush pen. (Well, semi-finish, since it's only part of this composition!)

I need a lot more practice, but it's fun to see that I'm starting to get it!

Miriam · 1 Jun 2018, 09:15

And here's my Final, completed with Copic Multiliner pens.

Thanks for the help & support!

Jon Anderson · 1 Jun 2018, 15:41

@miriam Very cool!

Miriam · 1 Jun 2018, 17:07

@jon-anderson Thank you!