25 Jun 2024, 19:15
@jahn I think you have the beginnings of a great children's book!
Share July HTFYA Ideas & WIP - (Food Truck)
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@jahn I think you have the beginnings of a great children's book!
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@LauraA
Thanks for you response! Appreciate it. -
@jahn
Thanks Jahn. This was my first idea but I think it might be too dark but think I might do it as a personal project. Appreciate you’re in put and BTW, I like the way your HTFYA came out! -
Hi! I really like this idea and I think it is clear and suitable... but for over a week I tried to get past the doodling stage, so I decided at least to post a smudgy doodle, maybe it helps me move on. Maybe I will manage today to draw 2-3 different perspectives in a cleaner manner and post them for feedback. This time the thing is a bit too complex for me - the food truck itself, the background and my ideea requiring 7 characters, so I'm still planning how to organise everything arund...
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@Larue You're welcome, and thanks again for the things you pointed out to help make my illustration story clearer!
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So many awesome ideas and mixed mediums. Loving it! Here is my drawing, which I am currently coloring. It has changed a bit from the pencil drawing. I still like the pencil one a lot, but the scan of the drawing doesn't do it justice. Should I leave the photos of the birds and bird watcher or do they ruin the image?
PS I had actually already come up with the bird house idea before Lee HAD TO mention it..
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@Arthur-Campling I love the pencil work on this
I think the photos on the side are a really cute touch but I'm struggling a bit to get the story. Am I right in saying that it's a food truck for birds? -
@Kristen-Lango Thanks yes the idea is that a bird watcher hos come with her food truck for birds and she i studying them and taking photos. In the digital color version I'm doing I have added small signs on each of the bird houses, like "nuts" "seeds" and so on. Maybe not the strongest stort lol, but om going for it
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Ok, I'm in advanced doodling mode now... I tried several pov s for the perspective but keep returning to this very frontal a bit flat one, but it's easier for me to draw and manage to keep all elements in good proportion... I also had Jack's voice in my head advising to pick a straight-on perspective rather than a difficult one I can't draw well.
Does the idea read? I decided not to include the more obvious word I could have used for the food truck name and allow the viewer some discovery... But the context should be clear.. is it?
I also wonder how to manage the main focal point, as I feel the scene is more of an "ambiance" one, so though the girl should be the main focus, she is not actually doing something very distinctive... hummm...
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@Arthur-Campling This is a great idea and the drawing looks so nice and skilled! It is very readable even without enlarging it.
Concerning the "Idea", I always fear when I have one I like, that it is too obvious and good an someone else will have the same one. In this prompt's case, when I decided to use a fairytale I was completely sure someone else will use the same one before me :))) Actually Larue posted a Hansel and Gretel sketch, it was close :))) -
@Oana I really like it so far, and I do think the play on Goldilocks comes across well and is humorous.
My suggestion to bring more focus to her as the main character is to make her expressing or doing something distinct. For example, one of the bears could be checking a steamy bowl of porridge and she is looking with disapproval because it's too hot. -
@jahn Thank you! Haha good idea for a Goldie pose
I'll doodle around a little more -
I tried finding a better pose for Goldie, I think I will go with the last one. I also added a chef's hat. Time to start making the final image, I have no idea at this point how I will render it
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This is what I have so far. I not sure if I will be able to finish on time because I am on holidays. If not I will post it as it is. -
@Arthur-Campling I like this idea! To me it was clear. But I would make the researcher a little more of a focal point in the composition. (I didn't see her at first.) For instance, maybe she could be a much darker value so that she stands out. Or maybe there could be a clearing in the trees that makes her more visible. Or maybe in the final version she could be wearing red.
I really like is the design of the birdhouses! And I also don't mind the photographs because they tell a little bit more of the story and they give you a chance to draw detail on some of the bird characters. It really is a challenge to draw something close-up and far away at the same time, and I see you wanted to do both!
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Moving to procreate where I managed to distribute and scale the characters better, but still have doubts about the food truck itself. When rendering (still no idea how) I will put the focus on the girl and try to leave the secondary group on the left less dominant - one thing I need to fix is image focus
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@evka8D I like the design of the truck, it is nicely drawn
the story is a bit unclear in the sketch - is the mouse family poor and the squirrel gives them bread after the food truck has closed? -
@Oana Thank you. Yes, that's exactly it. Can you think of something that could make it clearer in your opinion?
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@jahn Couldn't resist! This New Yorker cover, by the marvelous Victoria Krylov and recenty posted to her IG,, is on theme.
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@evka8D As it is, I think it is a good story, but it feels delivered too directly and it relays for understanding only on the closed panel and the patches on the mice clothes. Without these is just a family buying bread at a cute food truck. I think this could be solved by adding a bit of tension to the plot. Maybe the family has reached the bakery and seen it closed and mama mouse is already passing on, going to the right with one of the kids looking sad, but the shop keeper sees them and opens the window holding the bread and beckoning, and the little mice to the left see her and are smiling and calling their mother back, maybe pulling her skirt?