So I've combined my initial concepts from the thumbnails in this rough — Kamari could be interpreted to be either the snail or the person farewelling the snail.
The snail's spirit is being welcomed by a "Shinigami", a supernatural spirit that invites humans (or in this case a snail) toward death.
The human (now very tiny), is saying farewell to the snail and will be dressed with travel gear and rucksack because they are also leaving their home behind.
The reason I changed it up is because I thought the new beginning wasn't very clear in the last rough. As stand-alone pieces I'm not sure either is better than the other. As entries into Critique Arena I think the second rough is better but I could be wrong.
What do you think?
And if it helps, here they are side by side: