Dragonfly WIP- Composition feedback please



  • Hello SVSers! First time trying the contest, and first time asking for feedback. I'm all ears.
    I'm trying to work through my 50 thumbnails, and I've wound up with 2 very different approaches to the concept. I'd love to hear which one you think has more potential, and

    Concept #1 is a giant dragonfly who is destroying a farmhouse and a henhouse with the wind from his huge wings. People fleeing, dark stormy night, etc. etc.
    Screen Shot 2020-08-17 at 9.02.12 PM.png

    Concept #2 I'm not sure if I can pull off compositionally. Might be more clear in color. The idea is that we see a sweet little dragonfly in love, and then we notice that the heart-shaped reflection in her eye is not love, it's actually a big frog who's not trying to kiss her, he's trying to eat her! (big tongue coming in from the upper right)
    Screen Shot 2020-08-17 at 9.02.33 PM.png

    With #1, I have a lot of clarifying and solving to do on dragonfly anatomy, but i'm liking the way the light is working in the chaotic landscape. With #2, I keep cracking myself up at the idea, but I'm not sure how to make it read well yet.

    What do you think?



  • I like the concept of 2 but I think it would work better with a preceding image or as part of a larger piece where my other dragonflies have already fallen for the frogs trick.

    I think 1 could do with more of a story, consider why is there a giant dragonfly? why is it attacking a farmhouse? etc. Without such information the dragonfly could easily be swapped out for a giant chicken or bird or dragon and it wouldn't much of a difference to the story.... I like the composition of the piece though, so if it is something you would like to work on a suggestion would be to move the hill down and too the right a bit, you could probably frame in that area nicely by bringing in some more foreground in the bottom right. I did a quick sketch to illustrate this:

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  • @Gary-Wilkinson
    Thank you so much for the feedback on topic and story, and the composition suggestions on #1. I really like your idea of moving the hill on the right more into the foreground.
    Val


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