17 Jun 2020, 02:07
Hey SVS! I made a new cover, I’ve seen all of your critiques and I completely agree, I hope this is better! Thank you all very much!
Comic book cover WIP, Critiques encouraged!
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Hey SVS! I made a new cover, I’ve seen all of your critiques and I completely agree, I hope this is better! Thank you all very much!
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This composition works and reads much better!
Erich von Hasseln
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@Eelwick alright! Thanks a lot!
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@Eelwick
I added some and changed some, is it too busy? Do you like the other one better? -
@phoenix-yip This looks really cool! This cover has a lot more dynamism and clarity in composition than the last rendition. Great improvement!
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@phoenix-yip The second version of the cover is so much better! Great work!
I think I'm leaning more towards the version with the linework in the clouds since it goes with the overall look, but reduce the boldness of the lines coz you don't want it to be overpowering the characters.
A few suggestions I have:
- I'm guessing "Duel of the Fates" is the subtitle, so I think it could be made a little more prominent.
- You could consider omitting "written & illustrated by". If there's only one person's name mentioned on the cover, I feel it's sort of implicit that they've created the whole book. It would also give you more space to make your name more prominent.
- I can't help but notice that the little dude's head is right up there in the crotch of the giant dude
Either make him a little bigger or a little smaller.
Overall, very well done!
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@Neha-Rawat thanks! Yeah the crotch things a little awkward I agree
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How’s this look? Do you like the clouds better and is the crotch thing less awkward?
also how’s the subtitle? I changed it -
Much better!
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You made amazing improvements!! I really like this new cover compared to the old one. My only comment is I think you should still say "by pheonix yip" and maybe less kearning on that so it's easier to read. Also, maybe adjust the cloud shape around 'Battle" so it overlaps with the letters just once. It's getting hard to read there too.