October prompt sketch, feedback welcome
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Hi everyone,
I’ve only been around here for about a month and this is my first time to enter the prompt contest. I’d love some honest feedback on this piece if you see any areas needing improvement or perhaps suggestions on how to approach future prompts. Going through this exercise is teaching me a lot about illustrating text and it’s also a lot of fun!
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This is quite good. You've got a lot of skills behind your belt!
Not sure if there's much to critique- perhaps repeating the grass somewhere in the background, maybe by the car? Also at this point, I can see the negative space behind the tombstone may be distracting in the final, depending on how contrasted it is. Perhaps continue the tree line behind that tombstone corner?
This is a really great piece. Can't wait to see you finish it out.
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@TessaW thank you for the feedback. I'm definately going to take your advice on the grass back by the car. Also, noted on the negative space, I didn't think about that so thanks!
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This idea made me literally laugh out loud. Don't know why there are frogs in the electrical terminals, but I didn't notice them immediately. Sparky's foot looks a little feline to me...don't know if its the thickness of the ankle or how pronounced and sharp the claws are, but at first glance I thought it was a cat's foot.
Great concept though!
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@Aaron_T it does look like a cats foot. Thats why I added the spots to make it recognizable hopefully as a dalmatian. But yeah, you called me out on it, haha. I'll see what I can do.
The frogs are there just for fun and to make it look extra science experimenty. Too confusing?
Thanks for the feedback!
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@Zachary-Drenski I love that his name is Sparky
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@chrisaakins thanks. I was thinking about changing it but not anymore
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@Zachary-Drenski Yeah, dogs (even fat dogs) tend to have thinner legs, so that’s probably why my mind went there. Still so good though.
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Keep the frogs! They are perfect for the science experiment feel. I don’t have any major criticism. I just wanted to affirm the frogs and say the piece looks pretty fun. Can’t wait to see the finish.
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This is so good!! I laughed too.
Perhaps consider the perspective of the cable and either thicken it in the foreground or thin it out in the background. Thanks for sharing! I love your interpretation of the prompt. -
I love this concept too!! I agree that the sharp claws can make it look like a cat (especially the 'thumb'). Talking about cats, it could be fun if the cats on the trees look scared or are kind of hiding from the dog, so it could be fun to see their expressions too! I'm curious to see the final piece, great work!
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@Zachary-Drenski
This is so good! I also couldn’t find much to critique, but perhaps the paw could be more dog-like? But Seriously- awesome work! -
I agree about the cat paw and I think the idea got stuck in my head because you have three cats in the tree. Other than that I didn’t notice anything else, I think it’s a great piece and welcome in on joining the contests!
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Still in progress. Can I have some feedback on the concept and composition? Everyone was really helpful in the sketch phase. Also, does this picture make sense outside of the context of the contest? I want to know if it is worth painting for a portfolio piece.
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@Heather-Boyd @Aaron_T @Elena-Marengoni @Jellen thanks so much for the previous feedback. I drew so many paws to get to this one. I hope it looks like a dog now.
@KathrynAdebayo thank you for commenting before, I refined the perspective a bit.
@JennyJones sorry about the frogs
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@Zachary-Drenski , Very cool concept and art. I miss the frogs though! Having dad behind the wheel makes it more believable. Paw looks more like a dog's now.
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@Zachary-Drenski I did like the frogs...But I really love this composition much better! The dad running the car and girl running to the reanimated dog is much better story telling. I think all the changes are right on. The dog paw is certainly a dog paw and not that of a cat. It’s just a really good piece. I think it is understandable.
I would say paint it if it’s a piece that fits what you would like to be doing in the future.
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@JennyJones @RG-Spaulding Thank you for the feedback. In future illustrations, there will be frogs
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@Zachary-Drenski It looks amazing! I think everything flows well, the textures are awesome, and the paw is definitely recognizable as dog now.
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@Zachary-Drenski the background trees look like a lightning bolt at first to me. You might want to gray scale them or texturize them slightly to differentiate them from the car. Just my two cents. You might also want to extend them slightly behind the car.
