September Prompt Initial Idea
TwiggyT last edited by
I like both of these, but the astronaut in the jar is a great twist on the theme.
Finally had time to put some more work into these. I took the version 2 with the jar further and just fixed some of the colors and sizing and polished it up a bit.
I've taken that very first version into color. I honestly don't know how much further I'll take this one. With some big projects coming up I'm not sure I can dedicate much more time but I REALLY wanted to get it to the point where it's a bit more finalized.
I really like both of these images! But I don't really see the setting of "school" in the one with the astronaut in a jar. It's a super fun image, definitely, but it could be set anywhere. Is there a way to indicate it's happening in a school? They're both great images, tho, really imaginative!
That's a good point. I may be able to expand the background to include some familiar images in the darker region that would give that impression.
@Kat What do you think about adding some familiar background elements? Something like a schoolbus type of vehicle and some kind of backpack imagery is my first thought to solve that problem.
Shara Mills last edited by
@jdubz I love the tiny man giant aliens concept and composition! The story is a much faster and stronger read. The alien has more eye candy bits, but there's also more potential for confusion in those shapes. In the jar version everything is SUPER clear and cute and funny. Even the alien anatomy is crystal clear. Where in the classroom, the eyeballs on the edge of the frame leave some questions as to if they're individual heads? Multiple to a head? How many? Are they objects?
I totally dig the subtle additional elements too. Kind of a toss up which is stronger to me between the verticle crop and the extended horizontal though. Actually... I still lean to the vertical because the focal area is stronger. The question is which is the focal point? The eye or the little guy? I'm eye 1 guy 2 other aliens 3.
Might consider some thickness to the jar?
SFischer last edited by SFischer
@jdubz I'm just happening back into this thread. Wow the second illustration has really come along! I agree with the others on how strong of a composition you have in that one!! The anatomy of your aliens really shines here as well.
One note that might be a little bit of a wrestling match (if you're not sick of me yet). The lighting in your artwork seems to be coming from the jar. Unless the setting is in a dark, closed off place there should be some source of light coming from outside the jar. Maybe you could place them in the classroom, since you've already designed that setting so well?
Even still, if you just want the jar to have that special emphasis because you like it that way, then more power to you. It makes sense compositionally, just not physically.
Also just another thing to mention - I think the classmates' eyes should be pointed more toward the astronaut himself. My favorite of the three is the top left classmate and that's likely because his gaze is so well placed on the astronaut! (He's also very fun!) You could also have some fun with the lower left student by pointing only some their eyes at the astronaut while their other eyes express shock elsewhere.
@jdubz I think you're headed in the right direction, definitely! But I'm not sure if the items are strongly defining the space as being in school. In your first one, it seemed a bit more obvious that it was a classroom even tho things were alien - clock, teacher writing on the board, etc. Maybe this scene could take place in the classroom you originally had? Or something similar? Either way, I love the idea and I think the expressions on the kid's faces are great!
jdubz last edited by jdubz
Thanks for all the feedback everyone. I made some changes and smashed some of the ideas together a bit to hopefully make it more cohesive. In the end I ran out of time to explore making it brighter unfortunately. But I think I'm happy with how it ended up.
SFischer last edited by
Dude! Just saw your final in the slideshow! Great work!!