Would love to give a critique

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    @andyg I really like how this is rendered.

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    Would love a critique on this one. Something not quite right0_1514506350228_6829F1DD-11D4-49A5-B6FF-4061846BAFEE.jpeg

  • @will-terry you’re the man!!

  • @eric-castleman Thank you Eric - I really have fun with these πŸ™‚

  • @blessings Thank you for allowing me to critique your work!

    Overall you really captured the nurturing sharing time of parent and child!

    Here's what I would change:

    1. I think two main light sources often cancel each other out. It's easier to have one main light source and perhaps a second tiny one - if the fire has burned down you won't have shadows canceling out.

    2. I would turn the chair more towards the viewer in a 3/4 view like the one I drew. I think it would help bring us into their world and fit the room better.

    3. If you get good reference you can draw what I call "authentic objects" - that is - objects that have a specific construction from a specific period. When you're not sure how an object is constructed - making it up often takes your viewer out of the story you're telling. Instead of glancing past a table or chair - your viewer is confronted with a non-essential item that demands further inspection because that viewer is unfamiliar with the way you drew it. This isn't to say you can't have fun stylizing an object but it still needs to remind us of a specific object.

    Thank you!

  • @will-terry Thanks @Will-Terry I like your chair idea for sure. πŸ‘πŸ½ And thank you abundantly for offering a free critique and taking time out of your busy day. I won’t soon forget it.

  • I would love some constructive critiquing on a piece I'm working on for my portfolio called 'Accommodating Dragon'.

    This is a quick digital painting I did a couple of years ago:
    I love the idea and decided to rework it. Here is the new sketch with a preliminary start at a value study (though I hadn't planned to push the values quite as much as they appear here):
    0_1514672799191_AccommodatingDragon 2.jpg

    Before I put more hours into it and start the final rendering I'd love some feedback on the composition and what I've got started with values. I was thinking of going with a similar colour scheme as the old painting.

    Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!! πŸ˜ƒ
    ~ Pam

  • 0_1514836907226_missr-full_revised.jpg Here's the revised version.

  • @laurel-aylesworth I really love all the changes - This is a really nice piece!

  • Hi Will, I've only just returned to the forums after a long absence and I saw your post offering critique. I fear I might be too late (if so, totally cool). Here's my take on Mole from Wind in the Willows. Cheers!!0_1514863094684_MOLE 8x10 web.jpg

  • Trying to decide on shirt/shoe colors? Thoughts?


    Main character for book that has just been edited! It will be published this year 2018!

  • Hi @will-terry-art ,
    thanks for this post!
    It's the first time that I've done a piece with such a dramatic angle view, so I would love to see your take on it
    Here it is at the sketch/value stage:
    0_1514887501796_Happy Hatch day sketch 3.jpg

  • @will-terry
    I love your drawing! Having them jump off an object is a great solution. I've never heard those called a "sliding board". When I read your notes I had no idea what you were talking about until I scrolled down and saw your draw-over. I've only heard it called a slide. I wonder if it's a regional thing--kind of like soda vs. soda pop, pop, Coke, etc. My family has a book about colloquialisms and pronunciation differences across the US. It's fun to flip through. I wonder if that one is in there.

  • @amphailin
    I like how there are 3 "hats" on the floor, but the kid is wearing a piece of the castle instead. The objects on the floor are evenly spaced. You might want to consider making them more random. Maybe you could have a couple of them next to / overlapping each other.
    The background is confusing to me. The wall is very unusual. Is it a mural? Sometimes it's hard to tell what's going on when there's a drawing or art within a drawing. Also, what is the circle? Is it a window? Or a mirror? You might want to change to a plain background so it's not competing with your subject.

  • @jbleau
    I like the misty / cloudy moonlight feel to the background. I'm fairly new to SVS as well, and I'm also trying to figure out lighting and color. Actually, I'm such a beginner, sometimes I don't know what I should focus on first! I still need a lot of practice just on shapes and anatomy. So I'm just an amateur, but I can try to give some helpful feedback.

    It looks like the only light source in your piece is the full moon behind the dog's head (and some bouncing off the clouds / mist). So the rabbit and the ground cover & pumpkins wouldn't have these bright colors from the cool, dim moonlight. The gray ground cover, bushes, and background seem much more appropriate to me. Also the "carrots" sign seems kind of awkward and I don't think it would catch the light at that angle.

    I think the lighting on the dog looks good. I'm not sure about the red light underneath, though. It would make more sense if he was standing on something red. You might want to add a shadow under the dog, too. The dog's ear on the far side threw me off a little. At first, I thought it was the dog's jaw. It does work, but you might want to change the shape of the ear a little, and / or make the teeth whiter to help define the mouth. I like the energy & posture of the dog. He's doing whatever it takes to get rid of that rabbit!

    The speckles at the top of the image are a little confusing. At first, it seems as if they are part of the explosion of the dog bursting through the fence. Then, I thought they were fireflies, but there seems to be a whole lot of them. I've never lived where there are fireflies, but don't they stay fairly close to the ground? They also could be stars, but I think they are fireflies. Also, do they stop glowing when there is a big noise? (Like crickets stop chirping.)

    A couple of other things that aren't making sense to me are the 3 dots at the base of the rabbit's foot, and the shape of the rabbit's tail. The round shapes on the foot look like they could be the pads of the rabbits paw, but that would go under the rabbit's toes at the other end of the foot. I would make the rabbit's tail circular, oval, or round at the bottom with a slightly pointed tip. I think their tails are more compact rather than wispy / shaggy.

    Overall, you did a great job conveying the story.

  • @andyg
    Your car is so cute!

  • @will-terry
    Wow, Will! Even your chairs are adorable!

  • @pam-boutilier
    Pam, your 2nd drawing is fantastic!

  • @audrey-dowling
    I don't understand the circle in the lower right corner (is it space for text?), but I love the expression on the boy's face!

  • thanks @miriam . there will be a smaller illustration inserted there

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