Independence WIP

  • My idea for the prompt - little girl dresses herself for the first day of Kindergarten, complete with stripes, polka dots, tutu, and feather boa. Fashioned a bit after my own daughter, who would've picked an outfit like this (and most likely did). Very rough, some details will be easier to see when I've cleaned it up a bit. Any comments welcome, as always. Thanks in advance.

  • SVS OG

    Really cute. I did a dressing yourself pictuer too but yur is much better 😉 And it tells a story better too. Really cute and, IMO, a nice composition.

  • Very cute! I would add even more stuff to her room, if you don't plan to already. Clothes spilling out of her draws like she really searched through it do find what she wanted, stickers on the mirror, etc. Just my opinion, as I have really messy kids, I guess.

  • I lvoe the idea! I feel like right now it's more "proud" than necessarily independent. I bet there are ways you could add in some elements to make her independence crystal clear though! Maybe even a "boring" outfit with a note on it from Mum saying it's her outfit for the first day, clearly ignored or discarded.

  • @tessw Agreed! I planned to add more mess, but thought I'd put it on here first to see if there were any big composition changes to make first. Thanks.

  • @withlinesofink Excellent points and suggestions, I will tweak it a bit to really promote independence rather than proud. Thanks.

  • @marsha-kay-ottum-owen Thanks, I'm glad you like the composition.

  • More details added and inked.

  • @rhirsch Coming together! Looking good.

  • @rhirsch this is so cute can't wait to see it finished!

  • SVS OG

    I'd say you cranked up the cuteness level to eleven....nice work this is looking fantastic.

  • So cute! This might be knit picking, but I do find the note from the mom a bit distracting and I wonder if it's enough to leave it out and just let the outfit on the hanger do the talking? The note just makes me ask questions like "Can this pre-kindergartener really read that?" and "Why would the mom leave a note like that? Where is the mom?". Without any other context, It just doesn't feel genuine for the age of the kid, in my opinion. With just the outfit on the hanger, I can imagine that the parent came in and handed her what to wear, and then went off to prepare breakfast or whatever. Anyway, just my 2 cents.

  • @tessw I agree, I was also wondering about that. Kindergarden age kid don't read usually and I don't think mom would leave a note like that - not really age appropriate.

    But otherwise @RHirsch , I love it!! 🙂 Your character is really adorable

  • @nowayme I'll play with it, although what's expected to be known before Kindergarten even starts these days is surprising. Perhaps if I just spread around really bland looking clothing, or remove the note. Plenty of time to play with it yet, thanks for the feedback.

  • @tessw Thanks. Trying to make the concept more clear, but I do want to stay in the bounds of reality. I may remove the note.

  • I've removed the note and played with some color. What I'm hoping will stand out the most is the girl herself, the dress she was supposed to wear, and the little backpack to emphasize she's going to school. Do you think the other colors are too drab? I am trying to make all the other clothing look blah without giving them too much value as I don't want them grabbing too much attention. Maybe I'll soften some ink lines too.
    Anyway, here's the next phase:

  • she's gonna rock her first day!

  • Okay, final piece. Lightened some lines and colors, cleaned up some things. Thanks for your feedback, everyone. It helps to have different sets of eyes looking at things.
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  • @rhirsch Beautiful!

  • Just one thing.. no value on those walls or other items reflected in the mirror? Late suggestion in the game but seems unfinished. Sorry!

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