Kamari idea

[AngelinaKizz]

I’ve been brainstorming quite a bit on this one, and boy is it tough.
My story thought is that Kamari is the monster that has to move on, since his kid is no longer scared of monsters. What are your thoughts?

[Asyas_illos]

@AngelinaKizz I like it nice pov also

[AngelinaKizz]

@Asyas_illos thanks Asya! Do you think the kid drawing on the back helps tell why the monster is leaving? Is there anything I need to make the story clearer?

[JacksonAdamsArt]

@AngelinaKizz I like your concept! Maybe to have more of the "new beginning" side you could include the possibility of a friendship between the monster and child... show the monster trying to scare the kid who's just laughing, or the monster hiding under the bed from the kid who is happily looking for him? Idk just an idea

[Chantal Goetheer]

@AngelinaKizz nice one! Maybe give the monster a traveling back to make it clearer that he wants to leave?

[AngelinaKizz]

@Chantal-Goetheer what do you mean by traveling back?

[Asyas_illos]

@AngelinaKizz I don’t think the picture does much for the story besides add interest compositionally, maybe if you could somehow add a like a photo of a new child or an address to the monsters hand or something like that, might be helpful?

[AngelinaKizz]

@Asyas_illos great idea! I had a photo in his hand in one rough, but of the current child and felt like it made the story more confusing, but the reassigned child is a great idea.

[Jeremiahbrown]

@AngelinaKizz Love this idea! What if the stuffed animal the child is holding is a stuffed version of the monster? This way the child is literally embracing and accepting his fear and moving on from it leaving the monster to reflect, reminisce, and then ponder what is next?

[AngelinaKizz]

@Jeremiahbrown oooh another great idea! Thankyou!

[Griffin McPherson]

@AngelinaKizz i agree with what others are saying about showing the "new beginning". I was thinking maybe the monster could be holding a piece of paper that reads "new contract" and shows a picture of a different kid who needs scarring. Another thought is maybe give the monster a slight slime so it appears more melancholic rather than just sad. This is a really fun idea, looking forward to updates!

[ArtistErin]

I love this idea! Thank you for spurring me in a direction that will help me for this prompt... I've been working on Folktale week so haven't really been thumbnailing anything however really just sort of not coming up with much other than a shipwreck idea.

[Kristen Lango]

I like the idea of a character having to move on emotionally because they've reached the end of an era, but I'm not sure that translates into this sketch.

My first impression was that I needed to read your caption to understand what was going on in the image.

But I think with some refining you could use this same idea and just figure out a way to make it read more clearly in a visual way.

[Kristen Lango]

@AngelinaKizz ah yes ^ what @Jeremiahbrown said haha that's more constructive than my previous comment

[AngelinaKizz]

@Kristen-Lango no problem! It definitely needs refining to get the story clearer.

[Chantal Goetheer]

@AngelinaKizz I meant traveling bag. My autocorrect interferred

[AngelinaKizz]

@Chantal-Goetheer oh ok! Sometimes I can’t tell which way the autocorrect took It. He does have a suitcase he’s dragging, but it’s also a very rough sketch

[kirsten-mcg]

@AngelinaKizz This is such a fun concept! It kind of has Monsters Inc vibes. I agree with @Chantal-Goetheer about giving the monster a traveling bag, suitcase, etc to indicate it's leaving. Also maybe changing up the pose a little? I think maybe having it standing up instead of sitting might help further the story. Like he's peaking in through the doorway for one last look at his child before he moves onto another.

[Ladmireaux]

i love this idea so much! great choice!!

[AngelinaKizz]

@kirsten-mcg thankyou! I'll play with his pose a bit, the idea was him slinking out from under the bed, which may show better when it's rendered, but maybe he needs legs and a sadder slump to his posture.