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    • Griffin McPherson
      Griffin McPherson last edited by

      Here’s my WIP for the contest. Still lots of things to work on but I’m hoping it’ll be in good shape by the end of tomorrow.

      I don’t really have anything in particular that I’m looking for feedback on but I do want to note that I intend the garage interior to be all blue like it is now. At a later date I might make it full color but I don’t think I’ll have the time before the due date.

      Other than that just let me know what’s working and what isn’t!
      Thanks!

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

        @griffin I like the blue interior I don’t think you need full color. Looks great to me!

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        • Griffin McPherson
          Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @asyas_illos thanks! I’m glad to hear that, I really enjoy limited color like this and I’ve been working on practicing it.

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

            @griffin me too

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            • jenn
              jenn @Griffin McPherson last edited by

              @griffin I like how it is trashed without being chaotic. The storytelling of the objects makes it an interesting scene. I think the blue works, because it looks like dawn or sundown, and creates drama. At first I was wondering about the shadow of the robot, but then realized it is the road that the robot is standing on. If you are up for editing that part maybe you could try foreshortening and curving the road a little more.

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              • Griffin McPherson
                Griffin McPherson @jenn last edited by

                @jenn the shadow of the robot is one of the things I actually haven’t put in yet, I keep forgetting haha. I’ll have to see how the shadow looks once I add it and then tweak it from there.

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                • Larue
                  Larue @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                  @griffin Loving the all blue foreground and all the related details inside the garage! Foot prints read very well now. My only thing, and perhaps I'm premature in mentioning it and you were planning on doing more with it later but, I'm not reading Riley well, or rather, I don't know if he's falling off, jumping off or jumping for joy? Perhaps if he was crouched on one knee with a triumphant fist in the air. Realistically it'd be pretty scary "standing" on top of a running robot, like standing on a moving train! Nice work.

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                  • Miriam
                    Miriam @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                    @griffin It's looking good. The footprints are much more legible now & the legs of the robot seem more substantial.

                    The image is pretty dark, and the yellow sunrise / sunset is drawing a lot of attention for me. I would suggest lightening up everything other than the sunset / sunrise. The 'V' shape where the two hills meet also calls attention to that area.

                    Riley is more obvious, and I saw it as jumping with joy / excitement, but after reading the other comment, I see that it could also be interpreted as alarm. (I don't necessarily think it should be changed, or not — just feedback on how it reads.)

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                    • ruth
                      ruth @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                      @griffin This looks great! I really like the blue interior too, and also saw Riley as jumping for joy. My only thing is that I found the colour of the road and the robot a bit similar, so I wondered if you could add some glow from the sunset onto it's body to make it stand out a bit more?

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