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    • AngelinaKizz
      AngelinaKizz last edited by

      I would love some feedback/critique on the layout of the initial stages of my rough sketch for the February prompt.

      I’m still thinking of things that could be suspended from the rafters of the garage, and the little trinkets one keeps in a garage.

      “The garage was a disaster, but Reilly made something to be proud of”

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      As always, my pieces are done with my non dominant due to my dominant being permanently damaged in an accident 2 years ago.

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      • Melissa_Bailey
        Melissa_Bailey @AngelinaKizz last edited by Melissa_Bailey

        @angelinakizz love that your Reilly is a maker with can-do enthusiasm!

        Is that a rake right above her wrench? You might want to move it to a different spot for the sake of readability.

        And yes, I agree that you need more mess. The text says that the garage is a disaster, not slightly messy. Maybe have some of the mess extend out past the garage door? And have more of that mess relate to what Reilly has been building?

        Great start! Looking forward to watching this illustration progress!

        illustrator - author - smiley person
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        • AngelinaKizz
          AngelinaKizz @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

          @melissa_bailey
          Thanks Melissa! I will work on all of your advice! I’ll share as I progress. I’m already in love with Reilly’s spirit.

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          • AngelinaKizz
            AngelinaKizz last edited by

            Here’s some updated progress on Reilly.

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            • DoodleMick
              DoodleMick last edited by

              We’re did you get the info for the February contest? I want to start doing these, but I haven’t seen the post of it yet.

              Wannabe Caricature Artist and Illustrator.

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @DoodleMick last edited by Asyas_illos

                @doodlemick if you go to the critique arena website the info is there for the next two months if you can’t find it tap the big critiquearena logo in the top center of the page and it should take you there. Happy hunting! @AngelinaKizz this is an awesome sketch I liked her previous expression better though, can’t wait to see how it goes!

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                • DoodleMick
                  DoodleMick @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @asyas_illos Found it. Didn’t find the link anywhere on the SVS site, so I had to Google it.
                  Thank You

                  Wannabe Caricature Artist and Illustrator.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos @DoodleMick last edited by

                    @doodlemick no problem!

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                    • AngelinaKizz
                      AngelinaKizz last edited by

                      I’ll probably spend the next 28 days staring at it and tweaking it, but I’d love feedback!

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                      • Melissa_Bailey
                        Melissa_Bailey @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                        @angelinakizz really nice! I'm still getting over the fact that you did this all with your non-dominant hand!

                        Some feedback:

                        • What is the bear doing hovering above the garage door? It's one of the highest areas of contrast, so my eye keeps going there. Is he part of the story? If he's part of the background clutter and has nothing to do with the story, you may want to darken him more so he recedes and doesn't compete for attention.

                        • It might be the brightness level on my monitor, but the garage reads as very dark (I had to bump up the brightness to clearly see the illustration). With it being that dark, the clutter is harder to read. With Riley's dark sleeves and jeans, she doesn't stand out as well as she could. Adjusting some of the values could help you define your focal point and make the illustration read more clearly.

                        Love your creativity with Riley's invention! Her expression is great! Two thumbs way up!

                        illustrator - author - smiley person
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                        • AngelinaKizz
                          AngelinaKizz last edited by

                          Oooh that’s great feedback, thankyou, I’ll get on that right now!

                          We have a ton of stuff hanging from the rafters in our garage, and one of them is a giant inflatable Christmas Moose. Lol.

                          I will work in the contrast, and darken the bear! Thanks a bunch!

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                          • AngelinaKizz
                            AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @asyas_illos thankyou! I changed it back, I totally agree with you, her previous expression was better than the open eye.

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                            • stayhomejoe
                              stayhomejoe last edited by

                              This is great! I was thinking of what angle to draw my garage and how to tell my story in one go. This pic does the trick. Awesome!

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                                allevolz last edited by

                                I think having the bear face the viewer puts too much focus on the bear rather than Riley and the mess. Maybe have the bear looking towards or somewhat facing Riley instead of the viewer?

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                                • AngelinaKizz
                                  AngelinaKizz @allevolz last edited by

                                  @allevolz thankyou, I’ll play with the bear some more. I’ve shaded him darker in shadow so that he’s not so promenant, but I do agree that he’s still too heavily prominent.

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                                  • Griffin McPherson
                                    Griffin McPherson @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                    @angelinakizz this looks awesome! One thing that does stand out to me though is that bear in the Christmas hat. It’s so unusual in this setting that I think it becomes too much of a focal point and feels like it’s a bigger part of the story that it should be

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                                    • AngelinaKizz
                                      AngelinaKizz @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                                      @griffin thanks so much Griffin. I agree that the bear had too much prominence. I spent the last few days making adjustments on the piece, and last night I reduced the size of the bear and put him deeper into shadow. I’m still working on tweaks, and figure the next 2 weeks, I’ll keep looking for things to improve on it.

                                      Here’s where I’m at now. 4CC46304-8E70-4325-AD8C-F9BE269A3047.jpeg

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