Hi folks, I finished the rough sketch of my character for this month's Critique Arena today. She's a witch and her keywords are:
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Dotty
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Alert
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Hungry
She's also a herder of moths Any feedback you have would be grand!
@Katherine she's great, I love her slippers so much!
Great silhouette! My one suggestion would be the “Must be ink or look like ink” not really reading that on this character. Can’t wait to see more!
@Katherine I see you incorporated some moth wing texture at the tips of the cloak, but I think you can dial it up 120%. Instead of flat black, how would the character look if their attire is entirely moth inspired patterns? Could her bunny slippers look a bit more DIY?... And a bit morbid? But maybe that's not your thing
@Katherine Like the character a lot but I'm having difficulty reading the face.
@NicolaSchofield Thanks Nicola!
@Nico-Ecenarro Thanks Nico — this is just in the sketch phase so haven't taken it to final rending with ink yet
@Larue Thanks for the feedback Larue! I tried making the face a bit more readable but because I wasn't sure why it wasn't reading easily I'm not sure if I fixed it at all I was wondering if maybe the difficulty was the negative shape around the face so I mostly just changed that up — has that helped at all?
@willicreate Thank you — I love the suggestion of dialling up the mothiness 120% but apparently my drawing chops only allowed roughly 22%. And yep I do intend to attempt some moth-inspired patterns when I take this to final rendering I also attempted to incorporate the moth wings into the back design...
@Katherine Cool, and creepy! I think you're hitting your keywords of Dotty, and Alert, but i don't think I'm getting Hungry from her pose and expression.
What kind of inking are you planning to do?
@Katherine I think she is really interesting! For me the biggest issue was finding her mouth. I finally got it when I zoomed in. Maybe try adding a TINY bit more space on the face around the mouth to connect the top of the face with chin. I kept seeing the chin as something separate from the face. Just an idea.
@Katherine Definitely better, the neck still throws me a bit, looks like a large tooth. I think it would still read if you remove that all together or add a shoulder line/shape on either side.
@Larue said in September Critique Arena — Feedback on Rough Sketch Requested:
@Katherine Definitely better, the neck still throws me a bit, looks like a large tooth. I think it would still read if you remove that all together or add a shoulder line/shape on either side.
Am I seeing it wrong? I thought that was the chin, not the neck. The hair definitely did help!
Thank you so much everybody. This has been so incredibly helpful. I did a whole heap of face re-designs today and settled on one which hopefully fixes the chin-looking-like-a-neck issue @Frogpunzel you are right the "neck" is the chin. Actually hilarious how much work I did and ended up going with the design that basically added a line to either side of the mouth
@Valerie-Light Thanks Valerie! I was hoping hungry would come through with how thin she is but I guess she could be thin for other reasons. I'll be inking her in traditional media with ink washes. I'm going to watch that experimental inking video (that I think maybe Lee did) on SVS.
@Katherine Cool, I should check out that video too!
@Katherine Really really amazing. I love her design, you get the moth vibe right away. Well done!
@Katie-Carling Thank you Katie!