Please critique my work

  • Hi everyone, I would love some constructive qritique on this piece. What do I need to do to make it better?
    Thanks for your time 🙂

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  • Hi Julia, love the atmosphere and textures. It is very beautiful and I like the big cat especially, a lot of story there. I think the girl can be a bit clearer, het hand is confusing and she is not looking at the cat. Maybe try different poses with focus on the silhouette, can you still see that she is holding a fish and waving if she is all black? Then look at it in grayscale, is she also clearly readable from the background? The last thing I noticed are the leaves in the foreground. I like the value but maybe group them a bit more in the corners to great a stronger composition. Good luck!

  • Two things that stand out to me: The tail of the cat looks too much like a leg, and the silhouette of the tree leaves is too smooth, making it look like a mushroom. Arthur Guptill has a good chapter on trees in "Rendering with pen and ink" (you can google it and find some good images)

  • @Peter-Anton true, something was bothering me about the tree. Thanks for pointing that out.

  • @joosterwijk Thankyou for your helpful tips. I will try them out 🙂

  • Adding to the feedback above, I'm personally a bit unsure about the scale in this image! It's cool to have this massive cat and fish, but in comparison to all this, the tree looks really small compared to the girl as well.

    I'm not sure if the intention was to have it look like the tree is in the distance (hence small compared to the girl) , but if so, It's not reading very clearly to me. Part of that is that it looks like we're looking down on the cat slightly, as if the tree was below our eye level, when the girl is roughly AT our eye level, if that makes sense.

    Love the textures and the rendering on the branches and bark!

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