Together WIP- Thoughts?



  • Here is a piece in progress. Let me know your thoughts.

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  • @David-starfas I like the idea you have for "together". It's very wholesome! 🙂

    I think the stage is looking good. I like the sense of depth it has.

    Can I ask if there is a certain area you would like feedback on? The only thing I have an immediate question for is the lady in green. Is she on the stairs pulling on the curtains a little bit so she can see the kids from there? Or is she just introducing the audience to the scene? I think I have this question because her hand is nearly touching the end of the curtain; causing a tangent or nearly a tangent. I think more clarity on that would make this piece stronger.

    I can't wait to see your progress on this piece! Good luck! 😃



  • I love your style and the rendering so far! I always love seeing kid's plays in illustration and in life lol.
    I think I'm a little confused on the story still. I see kids in a shark costume walking towards the kids dressed as coral protecting the fish kid from the shark. Is this right? I think maybe drawing the other coral kids in more exaggerated protective stances like this: (Below) you could probably find kid references of them arguing or upset. I think since the audience is not as important as the kids, maybe dropping a row of people or have them more towards the bottom. Also, since it's still a wip, keep your lighting in mind! The audience especially. In the past, I've made the mistake where my audience became too dark and ended up creating a void that the viewer's eye couldn't escape from.

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