2 Aug 2017, 16:00

Nice job on the cleaning illustration. Very well done. I like how you have the chickens helping, though, I would have another chicken holding the hose, not the cow. While I like the farmer milking the cow in the first illustration, the cow should not have any other roles in the story until the end.

As for the milking illustration: show the whole scene. Don't cut off the cow's or the farmer's leg. I have included a horrible draw over (it is hard for me to sketch on my computer). But it gives you an idea of what I mean. The cow's head needs to be larger, and further to the left. Turn the farmer so we see his back. It will fit better with him milking. Have his legs back to help with the clarity of him milking the cow. Also, the farmer's left hand should be on the front most udder, otherwise you end up with the same odd milking position you had in the original drawing. Have it set in a barn. I think it is a good way to start the story, having the farmer working, only to have the chickens come in in each new spread. And maybe that is another way to take the story: have the farmer working on a chore as yet another chicken comes in to interrupt.
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