26 Sept 2024, 11:34
@Yogita-Chawdhary 
hehe, i like making everything a cat
hello, I'm siddi, new to SVS Learn forum :)
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hello, I'm siddi new to SVS Learn forum. I am so excited to be part of this community, hoping to learn many things.
I have shared my first fix your art work - saying goodbye. Please let me know your comments & critiques on how I can improve it.
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Cute illustration, Siddi! I love the cat-shaped spaceship and the expression of the character in it
Yogita Chawdhary
Portfolio: https://www.yogitachawdhary.com/
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@nohdee welcome! We are so happy you are here! Your illustration looks excellent. I like the emotions on your characters. The big question I am wondering after looking at this illustration is why the character in the spaceship has to leave. I wonder if you could add something to this illustration to indicate that. Since the one friend is holding a remote control, they might be playing a trick on the character on the ship, but the expressions on the friends don't look like they are being mischievous. I hope that helps!
Austin Shurtliff
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@AustinShurtliff Thank you for the advice. I'll make the changes. It does make a big difference if I think now.
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@Yogita-Chawdhary
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@nohdee said in hello, I'm siddi, new to SVS Learn forum
:hello, I'm siddi new to SVS Learn forum. I am so excited to be part of this community, hoping to learn many things.
I have shared my first fix your art work - saying goodbye. Please let me know your comments & critiques on how I can improve it.I tweaked the expression a little bit.
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@nohdee I think the new expressions really help tell the story! You can always edit your post in the October Submissions and switch out your older image with this one if you'd like. Let me know if you run into any snags with that.
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Hi and welcome! You have a very cute style, I love the colors and lines!
The sign on the planet reads "Atlanteeth", and in your submission post you wrote that they are teeth. I think this is a great idea, only I wouldn't have understood it's teeth otherwise. The image works without this too, and the characters are funny, so you don't need to change it, but as a general suggestion, as a learning thing, you could try play some more with the tooth characters so that you get a shape that reads better. One simple detail would be - no hair! Also, look at more conventional teeth representation and try to see what elements help make it readable as a tooth.
Hope this was helpful!
I used to draw cute teeth characters for my daughter on little notes from the tooth fairy when she was little! Actually, she was distressed and cried when she lost her first tooth, so now I see what a great illustration idea opportunity I missed -
@Oana Hi, Oana. Hi Oana, thank you for your suggestions. I will try to make appropriate adjustments. Tbh, I was creating alien characters, but somehow during the process, they ended up to be tooth-looking
And because they fit the story way too well, I have kept them as teeth. And that's adorable notes from the tooth fairy, hehe, hope you can tell how naughty the remaining teeth are next time if there's a chance left
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@nohdee I made the changes based on the feedback for my October prompt - Goodbye.
