28 Jul 2022, 18:19
@Asyas_illos I think this is a great idea. Plus it will allow you to include this piece as well as the puffer fish piece since they won’t both be on the rabbit road race theme
SCBWI portfolio showcase opinions please!
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Ok so far the dream race seems to be a favorite I think it really grabs your attention too so that’s a keeper I think I’ll try and rework the cemetery one with different characters because I just love that one too. Thank you for the feed back so far everyone!
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I’m thinking about a ghostly encounter on the cemetery road, does this work as far as storytelling and composition? I may add a character or two in the distance also.
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@Asyas_illos Great idea for the ghostly encounter! I like this idea.
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@Asyas_illos Number 3 should definitely go. That color scheme will stand out and catch people’s eye.
Yes, it’s a competition, but the biggest thing to remember is this is a great opportunity to get your art in front of editors and agents. SCBWI tells them you’re focused and trying hard in the right direction, so they’ll have they’re guard down a little and browse. Now is a time people will come looking for your work.
What do you want people to pick you for? What sums up your style best?
Hansel and Gretel may not have won in the past, but if it’s the best summation of your work, then include it. Definitely a great piece.
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@KevinTreaccar thank you for the feedback! @Valerie-Light hopefully I can pull it off!
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Asya, do you have a website right now?
I think your bunny graveyard piece is strongest of these. -
@Asyas_illos I think this is a great idea. Plus it will allow you to include this piece as well as the puffer fish piece since they won’t both be on the rabbit road race theme
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@Griffin haha yes everything I have is rabbits racing!!! Lol
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@KathrynAdebayo no it’s next on the list for me!
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Making progress, I had to stop and build a giant trampoline for my mother in law🥵
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Ok any thoughts on this one before I set it aside and move on to something else?
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I know this one wasn’t well received during critique arena but I’m running out of time and need a fail safe. I feel like it represents my style well , maybe I can spruce it up a bit? Any ideas, thoughts?
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How many sparkles is too much? Lol did I over do it?
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I think the sparkles are great! The blurry ones are a bit confusing because they seem like they should be really close to the viewer, but they also happen to overlap the back of the broom- so I wonder if they meant to be coming out of the back of the broom. You could remove them, move them, OR, add MORE of them- which gave me the idea that perhaps the bottom stream of sparkles could come closer to the viewer? Like we're in the stream, looking in?
And thinking about the sparkles- I think this is an opportunity for really dramatic lighting! The sparkles could be providing really intense and random light, giving you the opportunity to add small but bright highlights all over. I'd take inspiration from your Red Riding Hood or Redwoods piece, that have intensely bright/dark lighting.
Have you played with tilting the composition at all? The perfect horizontal feels very stable and 'at rest', but with the action in the scene, I think it would benefit from a more dynamic diagonal to give it energy.
The light purple behind them reads as very opaque, but I get the sense that this should be a very airy scene. I'm not sure what to suggest as a solution, but just wanted to call attention to it.
Oh! And I just noticed the frog just now. Oh what a cute little frog! Hmm, can you make the frog more prominent somehow? Like nestled in the boy's scarf and holding onto his hair? Or the boy's arm is outstretched and it's holding onto his cuff? I get why story-wise you might have the frog tucked in more, but composition-wise I'm missing the frog. You could also just brighten its green, or change the girl's green sweater so that it's not green and the frog is the only green, and then pops more. The comedian in me thinks it would be funny if the frog was at the very front of the broomstick, arms holding on, legs flying back, haha- but story-wise, maybe you want to show the boy being protective.
It's cool to see you revisiting this one! I think it has a lot of great elements.
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@Rebecca-Jensen thank for all that positive feedback! I meant to reply sooner but I’ve been on the road allll day.
I didn’t do too much added some sparkles took some away, repeated. Played with the color a tiny bit and adjusted some lighting. Since I knew I’d be driving all day. I went ahead and used it as a submission. I don’t think I could’ve completed a new one in a day. Thanks for all the encouraging feedback everybody! -
You have SO many strong pieces!! But that pufferfish image with the running bunnies is magical, and (in my opinion), is by far your most eye-catching and interesting piece
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@Meekipink thank you
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@Asyas_illos I would go for the second or third, maybe as the second is in a grave yard, the third would be my ultimate choice as it is so uplifting and fun.
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@PenAndrew thank you! It’s definitely on the roster!
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@Asyas_illos good luck with things, you are a great example to us all, next month I will buy an I-Pad pro and start my journey on Procreate! I have already designed my apple pencil!