hey friends! need advice and critique for this one
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I love the actual way it's painted. Really nice. My initial thoughts are that the lighting isn't carried through the porch to go with the characters. On one hand that does emphasize the characters but on the other I think it could be a nice way to guide viewers eyes when they zoom in.
Otherwise, I'm with the cropping, except maybe zoom out? Give some space. Just an option.
And the expression of the girl in the middle is a little cross eyed.
This falls under nit picky for sure, but I would add frets and a nut on the guitars. As a guitar player I notice stuff like that. So that's a me thing
But like I said, the technique and style is actually really lovely. The characters have personality. They hold the instruments well and you get a good sense of the mood.
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@Declan-Konesky I take back the frets thing! I couldn't see them well earlier
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My eye first landed on the tangent between the corner of the porch roofline and the house. Fun pic though. It has a happy feel.
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@RachelArmington thank you! ill try and fix it up and adjust some things
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@Melissa-Bailey-0 i made the eyes closed because i wanted them to look like they're really enjoying playing music. ill try to add a bit more clarity to that. thank youuu!!
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@Asyas_illos hmm a porch light! great idea, ill try to see what i could do. Thank you tho!
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@Declan-Konesky those are fair points! thanks for that! i wanted the girl in the middle to focus at her guitar but didnt know that she came out looking kinda cross-eyed. oof. ill try to adjust that one then.
Thank you!
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@Kim-Hunter huh. i guess that needs adjusting then. thank you!!
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The perspective of the roof on the right hand side seems a bit off. Of course the roof "tiling" could be intentionally misaligned, but my gut reaction is that all the lines would converge on the same point, since roofs are usually straight. I've drawn the lines which I would expect to converge:
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I realize that your style may not require super realistic perspective, it just jumped out at me.
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@Morten-Christiansen hmm yeaa. thanks for pointing that out man, really appreciate it
