Jake Crowe's Sketchbook



  • Thought I'd jump on the sketchbook bandwagon and start with the piece I'm working on for this months contest prompt. I'll just keep any work updates here for the sake of organization!

    dragon-sketch-web.jpg

    So I'm not sure if this reads as so, but I'm currently working on a dragon theme as many seem to be, as well as using shadows creatively, maybe not the way to go? As of now I'm trying to convey that this elf girl in Adventure School has brought a dragons egg she "found" to school while two friends and a surprised teacher who was in the middle of a magic lesson look on. Meanwhile, a dragon is flying above the school, indicated by a shadow in the play yard outside the classroom. Does any of this come across in the sketch?

    I'm worried I'm attempting something well above my ability and maybe with not enough focus on the story at hand as discussed in this weeks episode of the podcast. I'll admit I'm a bit stuck in my head too trying to steer far away from last months entry via what Lee was saying, that this should be more about an illustration and less a focus on graphic design.

    I've got a sick baby this week and have been finishing up some client work, so hopefully I can get this done in time. Fingers crossed!



  • I think for the most part it's working! I do find the bored vampire to be a bit distracting. Everyone else is really animated and excited, and then you have the bored vampire boy with a different reaction right in the center. He might work as a nice little hidden detail if you put him at the side and gave him very little focus. I think that bringing in the element of the egg/parent dragon gives a unique spin on it, even if others are doing the creature/dragon thing too. I like this illustration! It could potentially be a great portfolio piece.



  • It looks really good! Maybe make the egg a bit bigger to make it stand out more.

    Hope your baby feels better soon!



  • @TessaW Totally agree that vampire is distracting and he's gotta go. He's not adding anything to the story.

    @TwiggyT Good idea I definitely need to make sure the egg is seen quickly. Thank you, shes already feeling much better!



  • dragin-sketch2.jpg

    I've reworked my sketch and brought it down to what I think are the minimal needed parts to tell the story. I feel like I need a few details, like perhaps some things outside to indicate an Adventure School schoolyard? Does anyone think it's weird they have weapons in class? I figured it's DnD school and in DnD, you'd never be without your weapon!



  • I feel like the fact that she took a dragon egg should be clarified more. If you were to just look at it you wouldn't know that the dragon outside was the parent. My suggestion would be to show the egg hatching with the baby coming out, maybe just showing the snout. And to show the dragon angered you can have it breathing fire and maybe the gym teacher blocking with a shield. I think the chaotic background would be a great contrast to the joy of birth in the classroom.

    I really like the idea keep going👍👍



  • @DarleneAnico

    But still keep it in shadow



  • @DarleneAnico great idea about the hatching of the egg, that would certainly unite the dragons.

    I’ll give some thought to the chaos of outside, I agree it needs more. My concern with bringing in fire is it would eliminate the shadow and become the main light source outside. Maybe I should reintroduce the student pointing out the window? Do you think that added to the story?



  • @jakecrowe ah that is very true about the fire...I'm just wondering if this is day time will it change the lighting much? But to keep from drawing chaos I would reintroduce a student. You can have the student looking outside and trying to get everyone else's attention.



  • It's looking nice with the refinement of the sketch, but I kind of miss the depth and energy that the two rows of desks gave the scene. I think it gives us more of an anticipation of action- we don't know what's gonna go down with the mama dragon- two rows of desks lead our imagination more toward possible chaos and pandemonium than just one tidy row.

    As for the fire thing-I don't really have an opinion on if it's right for the scene- but fire is typically not a very strong light source. My suspicion is that it wouldn't eliminate that cast shadow, especially in daylight hours.



  • dragin-sketch3.jpg

    Okay, another go, any further critique much appreciated. I think I hit on all the weak spots pointed out thus far, and went in another direction with the mama dragon. I felt the shadow wasn't working the way I wanted it too, and I don't currently have the ability to pull it off successfully. I think I have come up with a solution that works well and will be more fun to draw. 🙂

    @TessaW I tried another sketch with two sets of desks again, but found adding the desks required me to add more students and it was feeling too busy to me.

    My wife says the kids were cuter before. I feel like they have better form now and are a bit more expressive. What do you think?



  • @jakecrowe it’s a style shift that’s totally fine. I don’t think either style is stronger. Just slightly shifted aesthetics.

    I do think adding the dragons in “person” does make it a faster, more exciting first read. It gives some really clear assumed story trajectory that could also go in unexpected ways. Which is fun!

    One thing I noticed, but I like it better the way you have it now as an illustration, is that the boy looking at mama is more shocked by mama rather than by what the girl brought to school.

    I like it with where he’s looking and reacting now to add more ways the characters are reacting to the situation, but I wonder if the guys judging this month might consider it a ding against prompt purity?

    For me, I think it’s stronger and more entertaining overall. So I’d keep it. Just wanted to note it for consideration.



  • @jakecrowe Moving the mama dragon to the window was such a good choice! It makes the the story much stronger! I also really like the kid who has noticed mama dragon.



  • @Shara-Mills @baileymvidler Thanks so much for the feedback!



  • dragon-sketch4.jpg

    Cleaned up, flipped and a few more story details added but finally ready for inking. It'll be a miracle if I can find the time to even get color flats, but we'll see!



  • dragon-ink.jpg

    I had a few hours yesterday so I was able to get some decent inking done, I would have liked to have spent more time on them. Managing my time better is an October goal. I should have some time this afternoon for some flats (if color choice doesn't cripple me.) and maybe a tone. I'll at least grab a grey Copic and add a little dimension to the piece. Overall I'm pretty happy with the transformation of the piece.



  • @jakecrowe it's fun to see how this piece progressed. Each post here your image got a lot stronger and the final one is really cool!


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