I’d love some feedback on two possible compositions for the opening page of a book. The copy reads:
“Every month when the moon is round,
the animals meet in open ground.
It’s time to put disputes away,
To sing and let the music play.”
One composition is more of a birds eye view of the party, and the other is on the ground with the animals.
JessicaLinnEvans last edited by
@chloekrog These tonal studies are fantastic. Great comps and nice tight rhyme!
Melissa_Bailey last edited by
@chloekrog what POV is the story told from? Is it told in 1st person or 3rd person?
If the story is told from a human's perspective, the first comp might more effectively help tell that story.
If the story is told from an animal's perspective, or if the reader is meant to feel in among the animals, then the 2nd comp would be the better choice.
Good question! Since this is the opening illustration, it does set the stage for the rest of the book. My personal opinion: I'm more drawn to the first comp -- there's so much going on and it's so interesting, my eye is drawn to that one. To me, the second comp feels more static, which is why I might not feel as engaged with it.
Hope this helps. Please share your progress with this illustration! We'd love to see more.
Griffin last edited by
I think the first image fits the text a better. It feels much more festive and lively and seems to really show what the the text is telling us.
Stephanie H last edited by
@chloekrog The considerations brought up by @Melissa_Bailey about the story would be good to think about. The first image has an openness and there is a possibility of more animals joining outside the frame. For me it has a festival vibe. The second one feels like a more intimate gathering of close friends due to the placement of everyone around the campfire. Possibly a different location in the festival would give it the feeling of the "townspeople" gathering together if that's the intention. You have an excellent start with these compositions!
patricialamas last edited by
I agree with all of the above. The two compositions look great for two different purposes! To me, the first option looks more like it’s setting the scene, as the text is, and the second one looks like you’ve now entered into the action and are learning more about some individual characters.