Critique My Ninja Please!

[Kori Jensen]

Hello everyone can you tell me what you would do to improve the character of my next ninja book!

[Sara Therese Art]

@Kori-Jensen Super cute character. I love the dynamic poses and facial expressions. And the flower is a fun touch. The only thing I noticed that seems a bit off-putting (for me) is that she's very dark: dark pants, dark shirt, dark hair, dark shadows. And it all seems to be in the same value range. For instance her headband gets lost in her hair because they both share the same value...

[Kori Jensen]

@Sara-Therese-Art thank you very much for your input :D. I figured that if I put her in dark clothes and everything, it'd be more indicative of a ninja. However I'll see if I can play around with the values :D.

[skeletortoise]

@Kori-Jensen

I'm thinking the dark clothing is ok, but maybe the shadows on the character are muddying things a little. You could also try for a slightly lighter value on the pants and see if that helps. Sometimes going that close to black can become distracting especially with a shadow on top.

One thing that I thought of is that ninjas are supposed to be masters of disguise and sneaking around. I wonder if there are some poses or costume elements you could try that incorporate this a bit more. Right now, she seems more like a martial artist without specific specialty.

The character consistency and personality is top notch though. Well done!

[Kori Jensen]

@skeletortoise Is this better?

[skeletortoise]

@Kori-Jensen Oh yeah, I think this really reads better! The pants still seem black, but just shifting the hue a bit leaves room for the shadow. Well done!