Fall WIP -critiques please



  • Hi, everybody. So for this month, I decided to post my progress on the forum and actually get your thoughts at the initial stages. Here are my sketches, they’re still pretty rough though. I was thinking of illustrating a school dinosaur statue competition using fallen leaves. My main character is supposed to be that kid at the corner holding a miniature dinosaur and feeling out of place among the other competitors. I’ve honestly felt like this a lot of times during my school years and even until now. The curse of being an artsy individual, huh?

    Anyway, i’m leaning more to that 3rd sketch. The one with the top angle view. I don’t have any illustration with that angle in my portfolio and drawing the dinosaurs in that view is really challenging and fun.

    Thank you so much in advance to all of your input. I can’t thank you guys enough.

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  • Great job!

    I wonder if it would be cool to try at this early stage, to play around with how much space you can put between him and the others, especially in the top down view.

    One thing I think that is nice about the other two is that there is more of a feeling of contrast of size, so they feel a bit more dramatic.

    Creating more of that distance might help give the top down view more contrast between the kid and everyone else.

    Anyway, nice work on all of them, and thank you for putting yourself out there and asking for feedback.

    I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this!



  • @robgale thanks! You’re absolutely right. Adding space between the main character and the others will definitely help him to stand out. I’ll do that in the revisions. Again, thanks!



  • The top down view, portrait cropping is interesting with your man character at the bottom. I feel like all those things happening "above" your main character in the picture composed in a way that it can be a good paralel to show the character being overwhelmed and crushed by the competitors. It makes a good underdog :) . I'd just make sure to carefully lead the eye to the main character. Can't wait to see the end result. :)



  • @nasvikdraws thanks! i’ll try my best.



  • I like the representation of the crushing competition with t-rex and pretty much agree with nasvikdraws :) I am looking forward to seeing the final result!



  • Hi everbody! It’s been a busy week but i managed to squeeze some time to flesh out this illustration a bit more. Please let me know what you guys think. I would love to hear your critiques. Thank you so much!

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  • Here’s my final sketch. Please let me know if there are some issues. Sometimes, when I work long hours on a piece, i tend to not notice mistakes I made. Thank you so much everybody.

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  • Hi! I really really love this, what a fun concept! Love your composition, the eye makes a natural journey zigzagging down the page until they arrive at the character down at the bottom, great job!

    It's the first time I see it and the one thing that stood out to me was the treetops. At first I wasn't sure what they were, they looked like blobs to me... I think the problem is two-fold.

    One, since the treetops are so much closer to us than the trees in the background, this close you'd expect to see a bit more detail and definition. It's a good way to differentiate different planes in your drawing to put more detail on what's up close and less on what's in the background. Here there is some inconsistency: there's more detail on the piles of leaves on the ground and on the dinosaurs we can even see individual leaves, but not on the treetop which are closer. Of course you don't want to attract too much attention to them, but a more detailed silhouette could make a diffference.

    Two, looking at how big the characters are I'm not sure your point of view is high enough to be in the treetops/ above the treetops! Maybe that's why it feels so odd and out of place to me... There is also a lot of them, while maybe I'd keep the one in the corner to frame the image, the one in the middle next to the middle dinosaur isn't needed in my opinion..

    I hope that helps even a little! Great job, this is so excellent! I love seeing all these illustrations for critique in the forum because all the feedback is so high-level, it's very interesting!



  • @NessIllustration Hi! I’m very happy that you love my work. That really means a lot to me. About the trees, yeah they do look very odd i must admit. However, i think i’ll stick with the initial design for now. I deliberately deprived the trees of details so that the eye would not linger on them for long but rather focus their attention to our characters, especially our main character. They may not be in the right proportion as to our characters but i guess that’s just me having some artistic freedom with it. I’m kinda bending reality to suit my needs... hehehe... Anyway thank you so much for the input. I’ll definitely consider them when doing future illustrations.

    So I’ve made some value studies and these are what i end up with. the first 2 studies are practically the same study with the second one a but lighter. I wanted to see if it will look better with lighter values. The third one is supposed to be an overcast day where the shadows are diffused and such. I guess it will look great if i used muted colors with it, making the mood melancholic and what not. Now, the fourth one. That’s by far my favorite. You might notice it’s more detailed than the previous three which were just scribbled in a few minutes. When i reached the fourth study, i had the idea of having the light source coming from the back. I started painting it and i really like it so much so that i worked on it more. I really am leaning on four but please let me know what you guys think. Perhaps you some critiques or perhaps you guys have some suggestions to improve the piece.

    Thank you so much!

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  • 4 all the way, definitely! Interesting light source!
    Some of your characters are getting lost though, because they have the same values as the background. In 3 for instance, you have some darker values on your characters that really brought them out more. This is going to be an amazing piece, good luck! :D



  • Love where this goes! I'd chose 4 for the lighting. It is very atmospheric.

    The only two comments I have for your previous sketch phase:

    • the T-Rex's facial expression is a bit confusing. It seems to be angry at your main character. Not sure if that is intentional. I think it should have more inanimate eyes.
      -the little diplodocus (?) in the main character's hand is a bit hard to read as it is enclosed in the girl's silhouette.

    This is going to be great. Rooting for you :)



  • Another vote for 4!



  • @nasvikdraws Thanks! Yes, i wanted the t-rex to be glaring down on our character.

    @Eli Thank you for the input



  • Personally not bothered at all by the glaring T-Rex. It's a statue, and it's fun to imagine that the kid wanted his t-rex to look fearsome and glare down and passersby!



  • Another vote for 4! I'd just bring back some of clarity to the trex grouping so they don't get too lost.



  • My vote's for #4. The dark sweater on the girl is more than enough to make her pop. I might reduce the effect of the ray of light a tad so we don't lose detail on the kids working on the t-rex, though.

    This is looking super awesome so far.