Some idea's that came to mind were to have his boat partially sinking or to show some signs of wear and damage. I like rcartwright's idea about the barrel, I think it makes more sense than a mini boat (unless that is part of the story). You could also include a sinking ship in the background to help create more of a story to the piece.
His left arm is a little awkward in that position. It doesn't look as though he is rowing, rather than he is just using it to help the parrot. I think having the parrot on his head (as was mentioned) and having the bird holding the sail whilst he is frantically rowing away from sharks or something else dangerous, as they both are looking behind. You could even reverse the roles and have the parrot rowing instead whilst he is drink rum and relaxing, if you didn't want to include sharks :)
It might be hard to show, but it could be cool to have them a wooden leg as the oar instead of an actual oar.
Holley, this is so fun! It's a really tricky angle. The position of the arm- I feel it's a bit awkward if the kid is just walking along. If the kid is purposely trying to smash the ants, then I think it's fine- but then I would make him looking down.
Other than that I'm a little confused by the expression of the ant on the left. Is it purposely pushing the other ant into the path of the shoe?
Can't wait to see this progress, should be a lot of fun.
@suzy-heitz I love this! The only thing that might need a tweak is her right leg (our left) the knee needs to look more bent. Maybe just a bit of shading below the short line and some to make the knee look a bit more like it's poking out?
Ha! Ha! I liek it. I actually think the three kids are fin ebecause they're all terrified too. It really IS the greatest fear! I also think the kid in the chair could be zoomed in a bit more -closer to the action! You know how close that dentist is when he's about to nail your tooth with a drill :-) But, I could be all wrong. Just a thought. The dentist could eb moved to the right a bit so that the boy in the chair could be zoomed in a little more with the "evil assistant" hovering over him. Then the back kids might not be as distracting either.
@nowayme I love this! The concept is great, and the drawing itself is well done. My only criticism is of the guy spinning the ball on his fingertip. To me he looks like an adult rather than a teenager.
There were so many shy guys in my highschool. In my graduating year, three different guys signed my yearbook confessing they always had a crush on me but were too afraid to say anything. I was like 'awww - I wish you'd said something sooner!' And I was super shy myself, but still I was the one to ask guys to dance with me at school dances. haha The struggle is real. ;)
Anyway - I can't wait to see it finished!
I like how you lit the art in the "x" concept, where you used the torches to light some of the tentacle. Leave the bottom darker like you have in "A", and I think "A" has the best lighting coming from the surface. And the size of the hole works best to me. So much more tension and drama as the diver attempts to make it to the top. The others are so brightly lit—and you have the hole larger—that you lose a lot of that drama and urgency.
@smceccarelli So useful!! Thank you so much for this wonderful insight.
A few responses:
You are absolutely right. I have no story art work to show at the moment. If I decided to go into that, I'd be building from scratch. Characters tend to appeal to me more. But, I am open to learning new skills... I'm on the fence there.
Great info about the online courses. Thank you!
Games are certainly on my radar. I know how hard it can be to break into Pixar/Disney/Dreamworks. Definitely keeping the door open.
At this point, I can relocate and my boyfriend and I are planning on moving in about one year. Destination is open... I just want to get out of DC. So geography is not an issue. And we don't have kids (nor do we want them)... so the time is now!
This is a very beautiful piece, full of action and energy, I really like it. Some random suggestions for potential improvements:
Definitely better with the silhouettes clearly detached (option B)
Consider clearing up the hand and arm action of the strong man. It does not read well at moment. I actually had to look three times to understand what the white shape was. Maybe the tiger could be also clarified a bit.
Is the elephant in rage because of the mouse teasing him? That definitely does not come across. The mouse looks like a spectator to the rage of the elephant and is not a first read either (the elephant is seen first, followed by the strong man.
Movement direction normally works better from left to right in the Western world, because we are primed by text reading direction.You could try simply mirroring and see if that works better. Also the position of the moving entity (at the "beginning" of the page with lots of space in front of it or at the end of the page and moving out of it) tells different stories. If the mouse has caused the elephant rage, then you may definitely consider to put the elephant running "out of the frame" rather than into it.
I was thinking a drum set even before I read @TessW comment. : ) Or you could make the box truck into a van kind of like in Wimpy Kid (Loded Diaper), and have a band name poorly painted on the side. How about an old couch in the front yard.
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