Hello my people. I've been listening to 3 point perspective since the beginning. I'm one of Will Terry's illustration students from UVU but I've never posted here. I'd love to start getting some feedback on some projects that I'm working on. Here's a project that I'm working on right now (no client) that's intended to build my children's book portfolio. This is my rough sketch stage, so it's a good point to make needed changes if you have any recommendations. I'll continue to post updates to this piece as I go along. Thanks y'all!

Here is my update. I took some of the feedback from @Heather-Boyd about the tentacles being disconnected and tried making them more attached to a specific creature (thank you Heather). I also tried correcting some of what was going on with the boy sitting on the tail as @MichaelaH had pointed out, thank you.
Sorry it took me a while to post this update, my wife had our third baby last week so that kind of occupied my time a bit.

@Heather-Boyd Good question, it’s not in there at all. I can see how that’s confusing or even distracting. I think I can try indicating that the head is one of the foreground monsters.

@MichaelaH Great feedback! Thank you. I’m loving this forum so far. I totally agree with you about the tail. I hadn’t intended for the boy to be sitting on the tail but if it looks like that, then I need to fix that. I’ll post updates soon.

I think it's great that you're tackling this in the midst of all the chaos that being a mom can bring. Kudos to you. Also I think you're doing a great job to ensure your perspective is on. As I'm looking at your most recent sketch I want to point out something. I feel like the doorway in the back room that has an arch, this is drawing my eye. I think for a couple reasons, as you look at the lines of the room, the ceiling the floor and the counters in the kitchen, they all lead your eye towards that doorway. Also the doorway has an arch and all other lines are straight, this is making it unique and different which grabs my attention, also the doorway is aligned with the rule of thirds. So I would suggest that as you're composing the room that you know that as of now the doorway seems to be a point of interest in your story.
Also I want to say that you may have accidentally captured the perfect reference photo for an adorable illustration of your daughter drawing at your table.

Here is my update. I took some of the feedback from @Heather-Boyd about the tentacles being disconnected and tried making them more attached to a specific creature (thank you Heather). I also tried correcting some of what was going on with the boy sitting on the tail as @MichaelaH had pointed out, thank you.
Sorry it took me a while to post this update, my wife had our third baby last week so that kind of occupied my time a bit.

@MichaelaH Great feedback! Thank you. I’m loving this forum so far. I totally agree with you about the tail. I hadn’t intended for the boy to be sitting on the tail but if it looks like that, then I need to fix that. I’ll post updates soon.

@Heather-Boyd Good question, it’s not in there at all. I can see how that’s confusing or even distracting. I think I can try indicating that the head is one of the foreground monsters.

Hello my people. I've been listening to 3 point perspective since the beginning. I'm one of Will Terry's illustration students from UVU but I've never posted here. I'd love to start getting some feedback on some projects that I'm working on. Here's a project that I'm working on right now (no client) that's intended to build my children's book portfolio. This is my rough sketch stage, so it's a good point to make needed changes if you have any recommendations. I'll continue to post updates to this piece as I go along. Thanks y'all!