@Molambo very fun idea.
I really like the later fly designs. The blue one under 6 is really working. I think it is much more impactful (and funny) than the one you have on the book cover. I would definitely go that way.
@StudioLooong I love the black and white. I don't think it needs color.
I wonder though if you could push the story a little harder. It took me a minute to determine what was happening. First I thought he was making a mechanical dragonfly.
Maybe something like a box of insects on the wall/desk with a missing spot. So that this is the golden insect he has been looking for.
This looks like a great character design, but needs to be put into action!
Some thoughts I had that you could do with it:
@Sarpong-Gyebi I would be interested in knowing what kind of feedback you are looking for and what stage of the picture you are at?
If this is an early concept stage or final stage the feedback I would give would be very different.
Looking at it, I am assuming you are doing traditional media (watercolor?) That make me wonder how willing you are to change things (is it a complete redo to make minor changes?)
Also, it is a little hard to get the whole feel without edges.
Anyway, I will give a little feedback just not sure it will be what you are looking for.
I think the whole dark to light from top to bottom is working very well. It gives a very foreboding feel to it.
I am not sure about the edges of the sky/cape. If it is supposed to be the witch's cape framing the picture that is cool. But you might need to give it more cape(y)ness? If not, then I think the sky should run to the edges of the picture.
I think the banner with the title is too vertical. I think you have room on the right to billow it out and then the words would fit almost all horizontally.
I would suggest next time to ask for more specific feedback.
@drawnbyshawn I like your idea of leaning into your character design. I think that can be a big differentiator.
I like both of your thumbs but I think the second would let you showcase your characters more. Adding more energy and life to each of them. I think you would be able to lean more into the personality of each.
@bofrese I like that the prompts you are generating are more geared towards drawing. It might be interesting to have different modes for drawing vs. writing.
My sheet is definitely geared toward writing as that is what I am using it for. I kind of need more of a story going on.
@EliaMurrayArt it is pretty funny how I stumbled on it.
I was looking for prompts online and found this blog post about using a LeapFrog game for prompts.
And I then I thought I could take the idea to the next level using the Randomize function in Google Sheets. I found some words lists and voila, I had a prompt generator.
As I said, I wanted the nouns and settings to be my own so I built those myself.
I have been working on a prompt generator for myself for writing. It is based on word lists that create a sentence.
I have updated the word lists to reflect 'nouns' that are in the world I have been creating and 'settings' that are in the same world. Feel free to copy the google sheet and update with word lists that fit what you want to write or draw about and this could be a nice tool for you as well.
I am done fiddling with it.
@Johanna-Kim I have not submitted yet. I can still play with it. I was waiting for any final feedback.
I see what you are saying about Bongo's eye. I will see what I can do. I think I can just remake a couple of pieces to try.
Thanks again for all the feedback.
@Kevin-Longueil this is truly a fun piece!
I had one thought, I wonder if you could lighten up the bird? When I looked at the whole picture together the bird has almost as much weight as Bongo. Which I don't think was the intention. I wonder if you lightened his value or made it a smaller bird if the visual weight would lessen?
Just a thought. Beautifully rendered piece.
@Brad-Newman I think you have done a pretty good job with your colors. Though I am no expert.
A couple of tips I have been trying to work in lately that I think help are:
@Braxton first I really like how you are using value and value contrast to provide focus on the main characters.
But I feel like they seem a bit cramped. I wonder how it would feel if you gave them more room to breathe. I would agree with @Brad-Newman that the animals are all about the same size and if you varied size some more you might be able to free up some of the dark space.
You might try lighting some of the bottom area where there isn't an animal on the left and then put dark text on the lighter area instead of having light text on the dark area like it is now.
Just some thoughts.
Okay, I finally got to finish cutting all of the pieces! Was down to my last color when I had to run off.
Here is what it looks like in cut paper.
Please let me know your thoughts or any improvements that could be made. It is NOT glued down 100% (some small pieces are glued so I could get it laid out). So changes are definitely an option.
I have some different shades of each of the colors if you think there is a problem.
I will probably glue everything down tomorrow once I have feedback and then move on to putting the text on the image.
I can re-cut anything so don't hold back on feedback because you think it might be too much work.