@nowayme Thank you for your feed back, its very helpful.
My weakness always been in values, maybe because i don't understand it.
I just turned the piece into black and white, and I can see exactly what u mean!
I am gonna mess with the values and see what happens.
About the story, ur actually right, and I like ur mouse traps everywhere thing, I think i'm gonna go with it!.
thank you so much for ur feedback!.