Hi First I like that you played in the last thumbnail more with the perspective instead of having a straight forward view on the table. It makes the whole composition feel more alive! Maybe it´s worth a try to push that even more.
I would lower the saturation of the hanging pots in the background. I feel like to have the three focal points (girl, dad, messy pile) is just the right amount to wander with your eye and to point out the hanging pots is maybe also not necessary in terms of story telling. I would also have some hanging pots behind the dad or move him a little bit more into the middle to strengthen the illusion of the pots being in the background and create more depth.
Hope it helped you a little

Posts made by saciia_
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RE: Feedback on thumbnails/composition?
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RE: March Prompt "Book Cover"
Here are already so many cool book covers! So interesting to see how everbody has a little different approach. And thanks also to everybody who invested time to critique my composition
Here is my entry:
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RE: WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
Okay, I made a couple of small changes. One of the best tips you gave me was definitely changing the boy a bit. I think I got now some more natural casually hanging in the jungle - pose
I decided to leave Bagheera - first I just love how his tale comes into the light space and also I like his presence - I feel watched and Bagheera is the one who always keeps the eyes open, isn’t he? Since there are so many animals in the book I just decide to leave something out in the hope that less is more.
Thank you all for the critique until now! It really helped me to see and think about points I haven’t seen before! If there is still something bothering you in the cover feel free to complain!Next step is a scary one: Colouring! I have no idea what will happen
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RE: WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
@andersoncarman first, thank you for your detailed critique!
I’m thinking about replacing Bagheera with Baloo... since Baloo is a character people have immediately in mind when thinking about the jungle book, ...and you are right about his flat bottom, I actually tried to hide it with some leaves haha
I tried first to show Kaa’s full body but liked it more when a part was hidden, I think that’s sneakier, and he is sneaky isn’t he?
I keep the fire idea in mind...I’m also really unsure how to include it and if I do I will do it in a very subtle way.
Maybe it’s also good to say that the book is actually very different from the Disney movie which picks just it’s favourite parts from the book and puts them together in a new way. The book itself is separated in a lot of different tales and some of them are not even connected to Mowgli. That’s also a point that makes me a little bit unsure about the fire idea.
@Sas thank you for sharing your thoughts SaskiaI will work on the details you mentioned! About the space above I liked that it gets a little bit airy, like the holes you have in trees when you look up a forest? But I will give it a try and see how it comes out
@Aleksey thank you! I will try to keep the values, even though I’m still a little bit scared that I will ruin it with colour. But I just take it as a challenge!
@CobaB Thank you! I’m glad you like it! -
RE: Butterfly race WIP
@demotlj Ah, I see! I think your composition is great! It’s just tiny bits that need to be moved. On the bottom there is the empty space, like a line and if you have text to the left I feel there would sit a lot of weight together with the horses and it could feel squeezed. I made a quick change to show you how I maybe would do it. I gave more space on the bottom and moved the butterfly more down and closer. I hope it helps you!
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RE: Butterfly race WIP
@demotlj I think your picture could maybe benefit from cropping it. I allowed myself to make a screenshot to show you what I mean. I also deformed it just a tiny bit because there happend some strange gaps while cropping. It’s just a quick try!
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RE: March: Book Cover WIP- critiques please
If you should choose one of the airplane versions you could always have the fox sitting somewhere in the distance so that you recognise him at second glance. I also like the left on the bottom the most, I think the composition is the strongest there. Otherwise you have a lot of good ideas here that could work as well! Look forward to see your progress!
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RE: WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
@Jim-Algar thank you! And that’s a great idea! I‘m still unsure about how I will turn the whole thing into colour. I was initially thinking about working traditionally when it comes to the colouring process and finish it digitally. I like to combine both and about a gradient map I never thought before - I still try to figure out which process is the best for me. Thank you for the great input! I will definitely try it and play around with it.
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RE: WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
@Teju-Abiola Thank you so much for your valuable tips!... and I should have checked the spelling before posting!
It's the first cover I'm making and if it comes to type I still feel insecure about it. So I'm really happy you pointed it out. -
RE: WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
@Aleksey thank you
@MichaelaH thank you for the tip! I will try that
@Jonas-Zavacky thank you, that’s good to hear -
WIP Book Cover „The Jungle Book“
Hi
I decided to make a book cover for „The Jungle Book“ for the monthly art challenge. I had a flat and more simplified design in my mind.
I started just in black & white to concentrate on value and composition. Later on I will work with colours.
One of my concerns is if the animals + boy are too present? I anyhow like how bold they are but I‘m also not completely sure if it works all together and I just looked at it for too long now and need some fresh eyesSo, any critiques are very welcome and I give you complete permission to tear me apart
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RE: new illustration
I have to admit I also like your coloured version a lot! Anyhow the mood is majestic and the last picture you postet seems very adventurous. So I think both are really good! Probably just depends on your story and character :face_savouring_delicious_food:
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RE: WIP Farm Scene
I just have to add it wouldn’t be a 90 degree angle ...it´s hard to describe, but the lines should move more towards us
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RE: WIP Farm Scene
Hi
What I find confusing is the bed in the front. I would draw the lines more in a right angle to the border line next to it like beds are also usually done. Maybe also slightly bended to suggest it is still natural bumpy ground. The overall composition I think is great!
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RE: Butterfly race WIP
My favourite is also number one
What I think you could add / change is to show more the speed of the butterlfy because he looks pretty chilled now, like he is maybe just accidentally by a horse race. His feelers and legs could be bended backwards and you could give him a more eager expression.