@Jules said in HELP! (Please ):
My project is... an “Art of...” book based off my own short film.
My short film in one sentence: Man has fallen out of love with his art until it (his art) reminds him who he is and the progress he’s made.
Sounds like a fun project Are you also making the animated short or is the entire focus creating art for the Art of book of the ‘would be’ film?
they don’t have the feeling I want so I am just looking for any tips: anything you like, hate, hate, love, what you want to see, what could be improved, etc. I have a list of the character traits for each “version” of my character.
Well my question is - what feeling do you want? You’ve created a character, now you have to fill him up with all the feelings so we can ‘read’ them in his features, expressions, gait, posture, costume. You might need to experiment with pushing and pulling of his features to create some very different versions so that you can form your idea of how you want him to appear because every design decision you make is going to lead us to think a certain way about him.
When I look at your character he reminds me of a cross between Roger from 101 Dalmations and Alfredo Linguini from Ratatouille (it’s the slim face and larger nose combo), which is a fitting association because they are both creative types. He seems sensitive, introverted, a thinker, hard-working/studious type.
Your expressions are reading well, keep going with them to add more variety (show the really extreme versions of the emotions you’re depicting). I would do some tracing of male character expression sheets (Pinterest) and then warp them to fit my own character’s features. Perhaps also make a 3D model (I like using plastacine over aluminium foil) to give you a better perspective of his head from all angles in space. Draw turnarounds.
My suggestion is to really flesh out the character as if he were a person who actually lived. Give him a backstory that goes deeper and wider than the single story you’re thinking of for your short because it will inform so much about why he had his creative meltdown and help the audience connect and care about him.
What is his personality type?
What are his relationships like?
What does he do to socialise (he looks like a wine connoisseur to me, like he would host small dinner parties and impress his friends with the skill of perfectly pairing wines to fine food to treat them )
What is his favourite.. [fill in the blank].
What clothes does he wear, why does he gravitate towards that style?
What are his pet peeves?
What is he absent-minded about?
How does he walk/move? I haven’t seen his body type yet but he seems like he would be tall and lanky with big hands and feet and a loping walk..but maybe I’m wrong. On that point, I don’t think the child version really looks like him, he needs a more oval face - can still have chubby cheeks and longer/skinnier legs (although this is all based on my assumption of his body type).
I recommend the Introduction to Gesture SVS classes as a springboard to practise showing emotion and expression and probably the Character Design one too (which I haven’t done yet but I presume it would help a lot!) And obviously, look at the character design in the Art of books.
I think you’ve made a really strong start and I can see you have a lot of potential! Keep drawing and looking at character design inspiration everywhere. Personally, I also have a lot of work to do on my own character design skills so my advise comes from what I have found useful in my own study.. and from my experience in character building for theatre Hopefully some of it helps you too!