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      A Former User @NessIllustration last edited by

      @NessIllustration thanks so much for that honest opinion..text is difficult, I guess I need to study that a bit more. Yes it never occurred to me until you say it that this needs to be a portrait..I'll work on that and maybe add the text to that added space.

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        A Former User last edited by

        and forgot to mention that actually this is all digital but with many layers of my own water color for textures!

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          EliaMurrayArt last edited by

          Something else I'd like to suggest is that currently the texture used across the whole piece is very even/all over. This means that the wonderful texture on the dragon, is actually feeling kind of lost because the same texture is found everywhere else.

          I also feel that you could push the value structure much more. Where is the light coming from? If you figured out where your light source was you could really make some great lighting for this scene. Right now there's no strong focal point/Direction for the viewers eyes. If you turn this black and white the values are all pretty even in the background and the foreground. So figured out what you want the viewer to look at... Is it the dragons eye? The girl? What do you want the viewer to see first, and what do you want them to see second?

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          vs.

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          Or something likewise.

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          Just play around until you get something that feels right for the story 🙂

          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/eliamurrayart/
          Portfolio: www.eliamurray.com

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            gavpartridge @Guest last edited by

            @Deborah-Cantlon-Lambson hi, i love the feel of the piece, and i agree the text is an issue but thats been adressed. Im also not sure about the dragons foot. It looks like the dragons left foot, but where it touches the ground it spans the entire width of the ridge hes stood on. Im not sure it would physically be possible to have this pose, unless hes reaching across under his chin.

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              A Former User @gavpartridge last edited by

              Thank you both for such great observations and the time you took to re work it @EliaMurrayArt!
              I don't know that I would ever have seen that @gavpartridge ..great eye. Thanks. This is why SVS is such a great resource..no man is an island. 😃

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              • baileyvidler
                baileyvidler last edited by

                Hi! I like the soft, ethereal quality of your piece. It reminds me of David Christiana's work.

                Bailey Vidler
                Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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                  A Former User @baileyvidler last edited by

                  @baileymvidler Oh my gosh..I LOVE his work. Thank you so much for that link..I'd never heard of him! That put some steam behind my work at the drawing board today. 😃😃 very nice compliment, thank you.

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                    A Former User last edited by

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                    I dont know if its me or is that leg is still at odds with the body.😩

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                      gavpartridge @Guest last edited by

                      @Deborah-Cantlon-Lambson Yeah, i think there is still an issue with the perspective on that leg. I've tried to illustrate what i mean, and done a quick hack job on the picture. I also still think the lighting needs work, judging by the lighting you've indicated on the horns, the light is coming from the top right as we look at it. therefor almost everything in the picture would be in shadow, lit only by ambient light. I'm not sure that's the best set up for this piece.
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                        A Former User @gavpartridge last edited by

                        @gavpartridge Thank you for your suggestions..I like the addition of brilliant light and your suggestion of more use of ambient which could be added with a bit of breathing fire. Another time!

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