Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :)

jULIANcHARLTON

Hi. New to the forum but been an avid listener to the splendid podcasts for some time now.

Here is my colour sketch for the February ‘Nightfall’ prompt... Feedback welcome

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Unsure why the illustration isn’t shown without clicking the link.

TessaW

I don't have much feedback for you, but it's looking great!

jULIANcHARLTON

@TessaW Cheers Tessa for that, appreciated and thank you

Lobalyss

I like your idea and your colours choice !
The only think that kinda disturb me are the top of trees, at left. I don't know if it's for the sketch but at the end at the top of tree the colour feel a bit rough, like it's cut.
Nice drawing, continue like this

fwolfs

@jULIANcHARLTON This is a cool composition! They only suggestion that I have would be to consider making the child and boat a little more distinct so they stand out just a little bit more! Great idea for this image!

Rachel Horne

Hi there, I really love this idea. I must say though, at first I didn't realise that it was under water. I thought it was snow until I saw the fish. I'm thinking it may have something to do with the tree in the foreground, although I'm not sure what exactly. Sorry. Hope this helps!

braden H

I like it! I've got some gut reactions here that are probably wrong

1st, I want something warm in the piece. Just a little spot of warm light. Maybe the kid's got a lantern (it'll reinforce the focal point) or the hook has a little light on it to attract the fishies. Or maybe the fishies can be weird angler fish kinds of creatures.

2nd, the fishin line is soooo close to being dead centre of the page. I might try a curving line, or maybe a longer fishing pole.

3rd, I know this is the wrong question to ask when we're dealing with floating sky fish, but what light source is so bright in the sky that there are shadows directly underneath them? The moon is behind them.

Reading above comments, I now realize they are underwater. However! My brain is still having a tough time reconciling the 'below' shadows of the fishies with the 'behind' shadow of the trees. No ideas for fixes, sry.

Other than that, this looks really cool!

jULIANcHARLTON

@Lobalyss Thanks for your input Yeah understand, to be honest the trees were literally scribbled in just to give the sense of there presence. Thanks

jULIANcHARLTON

@fwolfs said in Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :

@jULIANcHARLTON This is a cool composition! They only suggestion that I have would be to consider making the child and boat a little more distinct so they stand out just a little bit more! Great idea for this image!

Thanks. Good suggestion made Cheers

jULIANcHARLTON

@Rachel-Horne said in Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :

Hi there, I really love this idea. I must say though, at first I didn't realise that it was under water. I thought it was snow until I saw the fish. I'm thinking it may have something to do with the tree in the foreground, although I'm not sure what exactly. Sorry. Hope this helps!

Thanks for your input However, this isn’t under water this is on land and yes, the fish are flying

jULIANcHARLTON

@Braden-Hallett said in Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :

I like it! I've got some gut reactions here that are probably wrong

1st, I want something warm in the piece. Just a little spot of warm light. Maybe the kid's got a lantern (it'll reinforce the focal point) or the hook has a little light on it to attract the fishies. Or maybe the fishies can be weird angler fish kinds of creatures.

2nd, the fishin line is soooo close to being dead centre of the page. I might try a curving line, or maybe a longer fishing pole.

3rd, I know this is the wrong question to ask when we're dealing with floating sky fish, but what light source is so bright in the sky that there are shadows directly underneath them? The moon is behind them.

Reading above comments, I now realize they are underwater. However! My brain is still having a tough time reconciling the 'below' shadows of the fishies with the 'behind' shadow of the trees. No ideas for fixes, sry.

Other than that, this looks really cool!

Thank you for your detailed input

1st, love the idea of a spot of warm light (lantern). Thanks

2nd, good point made

3rd, well spotted... and yes this is on land and the fish are flying. I think I’d just initially dropped a spot of shadow under the fish without thinking from the outset. Thanks for pointing out

And thank you

chrisaakins

@jULIANcHARLTON I think you could make it more readable as floating fish if one of them was floating above the horizen maybe in front of the moon.

Rachel Horne

@jULIANcHARLTON Oh sorry! Well that looks great then!

jULIANcHARLTON

@Rachel-Horne said in Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :

@jULIANcHARLTON Oh sorry! Well that looks great then!

jULIANcHARLTON

@chrisaakins said in Nightfall - WIP - Feedback welcome :

@jULIANcHARLTON I think you could make it more readable as floating fish if one of them was floating above the horizen maybe in front of the moon.

Cheers. Good suggestion