critique request



  • @Phil-Cullen
    Was there an inktober prompt that went with the original Phil?



  • Hi Phill! I just wanted to say that I really like your work with greenery and the foresty cape of the creature. Reminds me a bit of Ghibli's Chihiro's spectre creature merged with Mononoke's forest universe. πŸ™‚ Looks fun.

    I'd probably work a bit on the mood - I can't quite read it (threatening, surprise, good, bad?) and the background is a bit flat. Perhaps working on the lighting will fix both?

    But I agree with Coreyartus - it makes me really curious to know the story. πŸ™‚



  • @peteolczyk the original sketch was for the first inktober prompt 'ring', there was a ring in the middle instead of a diamond jewel thing.



  • @Finn I'm so glad to hear it reminds you of a Ghibli creature. I can see what you mean about mood. I did leave it quite vague as it could be interpreted as threatining, suprise, good or bad as you say. I can see now I probably should have made a specific decision, as playing it safe and not deciding has left it confusing. Thank you for your feedback, very much appreciated. I will play around with it when I get the chance and upload some progress.

    Cheers



  • @Phil-Cullen Glad it helped, keep up the good work! πŸ™‚



  • @Phil-Cullen I remember it now. I get your image, because I follow and love your work and I can see how it fits with the theme of your art. To me it’s a bit like when you see an image from an artists sketchbook which might not be strictly speaking illustration, as it’s not necessarily answering a specific brief or story. But it is very typical of your art so to me it doesn’t matter, it makes sense to me. Maybe a snippet of a story waiting to happen.
    I especially like the foliage details and I really like this forest monster. They look like a helpful forest troll.



  • @peteolczyk Yea I suppose when I was initially sketching back in inktober I did have the idea that it was a little rabbit like character starting a quest of some sort and getting help from a magical spiritual creature, something that may look scary but was actually harmless and helpful in some sort of way. So the little rabbit character would be some what cautious. As I said there is no bigger story behind this but I'm always interested in hearing how it can be interpreted and spark a story in someone else. Thanks for the feedback.



  • @Phil-Cullen Wow! This is great! I love the character designs and the story is indeed intriguing. Since I'm not aware of the plot, I'm seeing this as a stand alone illustration and commenting as such-
    My main feedback is regarding the creature. I feel level of detailing in the creature should be at par with what you've done in the foliage and the rabbit. I understand it's a larger area to cover but maybe try and get a little contrast on the creature?
    The creature looks like it's made of a furry carpet-y blanket of grass, so a little more definition to the coat would really enhance the dimension.
    Great work! Would love to know more about the story πŸ™‚



  • @Neha-Rawat Thanks so much for the feedback, I totally agree. I'm working on definging the furry blanket of grass. Much appreciated πŸ™‚



  • Hi @Phil-Cullen love your work man. I just want to throw out there that I like these kind of intriguing illustrations as stand alone pieces. That said, I'm not an editor so I'm not giving portfolio advice, but I think a lot of people on the internet, like myself, love seeing this kind of art.

    I think you could strengthen the composition by cropping it so the creature isn't directly in the middle of the page. That's my one critique, take it with a grain of salt, because I know you have skills and vision. Looking forward to seeing more



  • @Zachary-Drenski Oh I see what you mean with the composition, I think I can trim a bit off the side, cheers for the feedback. I should be able to get back to this in the next day or 2 i'll post some progress.



  • Made some progress, thanks everyone for the feedback!

    creature illustration sml.jpg


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