Illustration feedback



  • @DarleneAnico I donโ€™t know Darlene, it seems like a tough concept to illustrate, with a realistic style.
    Iโ€™m just wondering if being more abstract or surreal in your interpretation could give you more ideas and options.
    It sounds a bit like a brief for an editorial illustration.
    Could you get ideas from some editorial illustrators?
    If you like the piece anyway, why not keep it and develop it.
    Hope this helps in some way, canโ€™t wait to see your next step.๐Ÿ‘


  • SVS OG

    I think you could ditch the story if you wanted to. If it's a personal piece, I think it's ok to deviate from your initial idea and just let things unfold in different directions.

    Here would be my quick fixes if you wanted to keep the story line-

    • Tone down the magical lights of the back ground, keep it as blue gradient,. Emphasize the magic coming from the tv. Perhaps make a magical trail of fish going from the tv, swirling around the girl, and connecting to the piece floating in the air.

    • Put the baseball on the same ground plane as the tv, instead of behind the tv like you have it. This will help the viewer with the sequence of events. It's the baseball that smashed the tv.

    • Think about if you want the girl actually holding onto the broken piece of glass. The audience will perhaps cringe at the thought of her hands getting cut and bleeding on the glass. It might take away from the magic of the piece, unless you intentionally want us to make the connection of danger. Maybe she can just be reaching for it, and the magic of the fishes is the force that's making her float.

    Just my 2 cents- take them with a grain of salt!



  • @peteolczyk That's a good idea. I'll look into editorials. Thank you๐Ÿ˜€



  • @TessaW Hmm yeah I see. I'll take those into consideration as I rework the thumbnails. I really appreciate your feedback thank you๐Ÿ˜€



  • I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this illustration. It's totally fine to make a painting that looks mysterious or surreal, and there are people out there who love that kind of stuff, like me.

    I guess it comes down to deciding what the illustration is going to be used for. I'm assuming that children's book editors want to see portfolio pieces where the story is more direct.



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    So this is where I'm at with the image. I had to stop from this piece in order to finish some other ones. I've added a big fish And the fish on the TV screens are now more visible which I believe helps with the composition.

    Critiques are welcome as I want to make this a print for an upcoming artshow.



  • @DarleneAnico just doing a quick read on this and using the strategy by @davidhohn of squinting it down, I noticed your values are really mixing. Once you squint the person merges into the background.

    You might want to lighten the background or darken the person? Not 100% sure. But I am losing the person...



  • @theprairiefox hm ok I see what you mean im going to darken the person. Thank you!



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    Iโ€™ve finished the illustration. Iโ€™m going to step away from it now and look at it with fresh eyes tomorrow.

    Feedback is welcome๐Ÿ˜„



  • @DarleneAnico it is much improved and the colours are very on point for the mood of a calm and imaginative moment.



  • @Heather-Boyd thank you very much! And sorry for the late reply



  • magical! very well done. hadn't peeked in before now but glad I did!


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