"The Moment Before I Lost My Mom" Kids Book Project Progress for SCBIW Portfolio Preview. . .and eventually Self Publish by April 2020
sarahlawrence last edited by
@Squirrel-Size really excited to see this grow into a picture book.
I definitely agree you can remove the word “can” from most pages. You could also combine spreads 5 and 6 into one spread, leaving room for the baby girl goat to show some sadness on her own.
Here’s my thoughts on the text/ what I’d change it to:
1: My Garden is my happy place
2: I come here to escape
3: Especially when I’m tired or sad
4: Here I can help things grow
5: Here I can smell things
6: Here I can feel happiness growing
7: When I want to share my happiness...
9: I take it to someone who is sad
10:... like my mom
11: ( I don’t think you need any text here your image is pretty powerful) or something like “ she’s not here anymore “
12: So I remember her through my flowers
I love the emotions in this, also there definitely need to be more goats in children’s books, they’re super cute.
Hope this helps, just my two cents
Thanks @sarahlawrence for the input! I'll fiddle around with the text some more! Love seeing your take on it Thanks
The Drawing Below:
Okay! I spent about 4 hours sketching this on Friday and about 2 hours doing sketch studies. I wished I could have completed it, but I moved my tiny house Saturday and it took my WHOLE day! Sunday is family time. I think I'm gonna just have to give something up day to day to have at least an hour a day to work on this and then 6 hours on Friday. I think, I need to set up a schedule of what needs to be done, so I don't fall behind before my deadline. Wow, time management can be hard! I feel like I'm back in art school again lol
I plan to keep most of the finished drawings black and white without any color for the dummy book. And then this winter I plan to complete them with color and format it.
I love your finished piece and I think it is going to be a beautiful book when you're done. Very touching. The dummy is looking good. I have no critiques at this time.
Sooooo, last night, I figured out my scheduling for what all I need to have done before my dummy book deadline. (Aug 31st). Just over a month left. Ugh! I have to get at least two spreads drawn out a week! This is going to be an interesting 6 weeks.
Below is one of the spreads I plan to work on this week (Spread 5). I'm leaning towards 7 & 8. How about you all?
Okay, spread 5! I started this baby last night! Before I hit the detail stage (hopefully tonight/probably this weekend), You all let me know your thoughts if you have any
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@Squirrel-Size Lovely sketch...the big sun hat is a nice touch! and the little birds are very cute
Storyboard sketch (SPREAD 9):
Detail study sketch:
YEY! I got everything sketch, but now I just gotta finished both my new layouts, finished up the layout from last week. And finish my Croc Picnic pice for the monthly prompted. Wow, I think I know what I'm doing with my three day weekend.
Let me know what you all think? I'm wondering about the stepping stones on the first page, they look like they are floating a bit. But that could be remedied during the color stage. Also should I have them going completely across the page vs. halfway like they are now? Let me know your opinions
Alicja W last edited by
Environment heavy spreads have always been my favorite! This tree home looks like the coziest place to live. I like your decision of having the elements from the right side of the spread merge into the left side. I think continuing the stones until the left-most part of the spread could be a good idea. Then the reader can visually follow the stones (path) the character took to the right spread. I also wonder if adding more decorative elements (like the flowers) to the left spread would be a good idea. I like that the text balances the image in the composition, but wonder if more should be added or if keeping it very simple is the way to go. And I think to answer this, I would just continue the treatment of the other spreads you have on this one. So if they've had a lot of breathing room this one works as is. Something else to think about is pacing. I feel like this is leading up to the climax of the story, so maybe thinking about how you can build that anticipation until the next spread (which I'm reading as the climax). I definitely don't have the answers to these questions, but hope it's something that can get you thinking some more about your story's layout and how it reads. Best of luck!
@Squirrel-Size another beautiful piece ️
@Squirrel-Size I saw your hummingbird sketches on IG—so good!
CLCanadyArts last edited by
I'm definitely buying this when its published. Bittersweet, and beautiful.
How is the project going?
Julia last edited by
sooo inspiring! I am struggling with my own little story for more than 1 year now, not doing much (and having 3 other stories now that I want to illustrate!). When I see your work and dedication, I feel I can achieve this too. Thank you so much! I just decided to go to bed early today to set again my morning routine and finally drawing my book!
Julia last edited by
a video that made me re-design my thumbnails... yours are great, so I don't think it would be as useful as for me, but I though you'd enjoy the video as well. Cheers !
@Alicja-W Awe! Thanks your input is sooo helpful.This is the most heaviest environmental book I've ever done. It has its challenges for sure. The more I look at it the more I agree with putting the stone walkway all across the left bottom page. A lot of the spreads will have that kind of layout, with a fully rendered page and then the text page with a few elements embellishing it. Wow, I haven't thought of this spread in that way, about it leading up to the climax of the story. That's something I definitely need to be away of. Thanks again!
Thanks @BichonBistro I really had fun sketching those little birds.
@CLCanadyArts Awe! Thats so sweet! I'll have to personally sign it for you
@Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen Hey Marsha! the project is going great! I got at least 12 hours of sketching down this weekend! I'll post in a bit what I got done.
@Julia You can do it girl! I would love to hear more about your book project! And thanks for the video link! I'll check it out for sure.
Mostly finished the drawing stage of spread 11 from week two! yay! All caught up!
Spread 5 is almost done! Just a few finishing touches and maybe a second sunflower so the one sunflower wont get too lonely. Oh! That almost sounded like Bob Ross! I think I'm related to him, hehehehe
Mostly done with spread 9 too! might be tweaking a few thing here and there as it sits and pickles this week.
Now I gotta figure out what two spreads I'm gonna start this week
Okay! Here are some book cover ideas! I'm not sure what the title will be yet, and you all can help me with that. Right now i have it as: "When I Remember You" I looked that title up and there are a whole lot of "I Remember You" books out there already which is similar. Let me know your thoughts/ideas of book titles/names.
Which thumbnail touches your heart strings? I have several favs. I'm really liking numbers 1, 5, 6 and 7. What are you'll thoughts?
@Squirrel-Size I love #7 ️ but really the only one that doesn’t grab me is #6.