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I made some changes last night (up until three am, actually). What do yuo think? I'll keep looking it over and see what else there is before I try and do the big ones.
Marsha, I think this is a charming story! I love the addition of the dog and cat, they're fun characters. I'm not sure having the last two lines rhyme with each other keeps the same flow as the rest of the story, but this is a great project and I'm looking forward to seeing you develop it. Great job!
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@marsha-kay-ottum-owen I love what you're doing so far.
@kat thank you ️
@jeanebean I'm also hoping that kids relate to the forgetfulness of Granny (just like they forget). The older we get the more kdlike we get, I think. After all we often end up toddling and in diapers! (not there yet...thankfully)
Still working on this! I've been getting some other critiques too. Here are some pages of my latest changes.... !
Oh! One more.
This is a really lovely story idea, everyone loves a good Granny story and it made me smile - i particularly like the dog and cat too, but I agree with @JeaneBean about adding a little grandchild in there too! Your initial drawings are charming and really compliment the story
Maybe the story could be told from the perspective of the grandchild too as your poem is lovely but there are a couple of parts that don't flow as nicely as others, maybe something like this...
"My Granny can't find her glasses,
and now she's lost her keys!
She can't find a tissue,
and she really has to sneeze!
Her right sock is missing,
And so is her left shoe,
She's meant to be going shopping
but what is she to do?
She looks inside her handbag,
and rifles through her drawer,
she peers under the sofa
and looks behind the door.
The dog and I start looking,
and so does Sid (?) the Cat,
but what is that poking
out from Granny's big red hat?
Hurray! Granny found her glasses,
so now she can see!
Here's her box of tissues
and here are her keys!
Her stocking was in her left shoe..."
(Sorry I can't seem to read the rest)
Look forward to seeing where you take it
@marsha-kay-ottum-owen I'm really enjoying this and looking forward to seeing the paintings. (And if you changed it from glasses to keys, you'd be describing my life.)