Slowvember WIP- Critiques please

  • I totally agree with @Johanna-Kim ! It is a beautiful image... as I am looking on it - I am not focusing on the cancer undertone but on the relationship between these characters.

  • @nyrrylcadiz I also didn't get the backstory at all until I read your text. Like @Johanna-Kim I thought they were sweethearts and agree with @nasvikdraws that more clues could be added. It's a lovely image--the light is beautiful and the whole thing is treated so sensitively. (Not insensitive at all, in fact, quite the opposite! The main character here is love; the illness is important but secondary) I love the themes you're exploring. You're really versatile and can capture these emotions. Please don't stop--you're really doing great stuff lately!

  • Great piece! I thought she was sick when I first saw it, but wasn’t 100% sure. I definitely got a sense that she was frail and he was taking care of her. I don’t think it’s insensitive at all.

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    Hi, everybody! Here’s an update on th piece. Since you mentioned that the girl character didn’t immediatey suggest that she’s ill based on your first glance, I decided to add a breathing tube to further emphasize that detail. Please let me know what you think. Also if you see anything wonky-looking or something, please feel free to point them out. Thank you.

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    @Johanna-Kim Thanks! I hope you find the newer version conveys the cancer detail better. I was actually considering making them sweethearts if the ailment theme doesn’t work out. Thanks for sharing your criitique.

    @nasvikdraws I’m really goad you like the piece. I’m kinda unsure with the lighting though. I’m not sure if it’s too much or not. I hope the newly added clues help relay the message better. I also see what you meant with the boy’s eyes. I fixed the a bit and made him shed a few tears. Please let me know if you think the tears are just overkill. Thank you very much.

    @Eli Thank you! You know, I guess they could very much be sweethearts too. I haven’t really set up a fixed relationship for these 2 characters. I guess they could be siblings, lovers, or just friends, depending on the viewer. I hope the added details emphasizes the cancer bit more. Also, it’s really great that you mentioned the theme of Love. I haven’t really thought about that when making the piece. I was thinking of something serene and sad. Now, that you’ve mentioned it, it opened my eyes more as well to the piece’s depth. Thank you so much.

    @Jonas-Zavacky thank you! I hope you like the new version as well.

    @Kristin-Wauson i hope this new piece conveys that clearer. Thank yuo!

  • @nyrrylcadiz I think you nailed it! Now it's pretty clear what is going on, and it still has the warm, glowing love. Very sweet and sad but beautiful, too.

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    Really nice work. I was impressed at how you managed to make the girl’s eyes look sick or frail in the original but the oxygen tube really tells the story now.

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    @nyrrylcadiz Perfect fix! Your concept is clear and it fits the theme. Such a sad idea but executed brilliantly as usual.

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    Hi, guys! Just curious on what you think about that store sign in the background. I really think it may need some more work.

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    @eli @demotlj @Johanna-Kim Thank you so much! I’m really glad you guys like it. Is there anything you think I should work on more?

  • This piece looks absolutely wonderful, and the story behind it is heartwarming and beautiful! Very successful overall. A small change that might benefit it further is a slight change of the boy's eyes. To me, it looks like he is looking towards the ground, not his sister. Angling them more downwards and to the left will make it look like he's looking at her more, especially if we can't see the full circle of his irises!

  • So beautiful, such a warm atmosphere! Not insensitive, just really lovely. I like that you added the breathing tube, I think it was a good decision. I actually like that the store sign is soft and doesn't stick out. Great work! 😊

  • @nyrrylcadiz The store sign looks fine to me...

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    I just finished this piece and submitted it. I don’t know if they’ll still consider it given the late submission. Nevertheless, I wanted to show you guys the finished product. Probably the hardest part of this piece is my characters’ faces. It’s really hard to convey emotion especially those you don’t draw quite often, especially the boy’s. I honestly did not know how to make him look sad yet happy at the same time without him looking smug or indiferrent. Anyway, here it is. Thank you so much to everyone who shared their thoughts and critiques. Thank you!


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