Composition Goal....did it get it?!



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    Presketch composition.

    Goal: This Is the introductory illustration and needs to convey that this new pencil is the โ€œend all, be allโ€ to know how to draw! ๐Ÿ˜‚ Did I hit that?!

    Please tell me one reason why or why not!

    Far from the color stage, but the wall will be muted , (undecided if I will keep subtle brick work lines ) so that Duddles and the new pencil pop against the background.

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    This is another joke/fan illustration of an illustrator I admire (in addition to Will, Jake & Lee of course ๐Ÿ˜œ) I posted on my IG that he is an amalgam of: James Harden, Ronnie Coleman and Kadir Nelson! ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚



  • In my opinion, YES! I love the joyful expression on the kid's face, and I like the perspective a lot! I love how he has the pencil elevated. I guess if one thing feels just a little off to me, it's the position of his legs--maybe if he looked more like he is bouncing a bit to match his elated upper body gesture? His feet feel too grounded and I'd like to see more of a "walking on air" kind of feeling... I hope this makes sense. Also, if I could get one of those pencils, I'd be pretty happy, too!



  • Nice image, one tiny thing if your keeping the line work in the final then I would change the direction of the pavement lines as it looks like a drop of



  • @rcartwright Thanks, ha it does look like a drop off. Those are however just scribbles to indicate the contrast of the street to sidewalk....silimilar to the scribbles in the top right corner. Thanks again.



  • @eli Thank toy sooooo much....I really needed another pair o eyes. Thatโ€™s what itโ€™s missing. I will raise that left foot or a joyful leap. Thank you thank you thank you.... I sincerely mean that.



  • @art-dud Yay! so glad it helped! looking forward to seeing the progress on this! ๐Ÿ˜Š



  • Love the emotion youโ€™re striving to convey! There are a couple of things I would change, but the one that stands out more is that the kid looks too small compared to his surroundings. He is also in the dead center of the composition - it may look more dynamic if you shift him slightly off-center, ideally with his head on one of the thirds line. Your perspective is also a little off - the pavement and brick lines should be slightly converging to their off-page vanishing points, and the vertical lines would be converging towards the bottom, not towards the top, as you have them now. I love his expression!



  • @smceccarelli Thank You so much for your response. I will emplimemt these and repost.



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    Adjustments made based on suggestions. Thanks @smceccarelli @rcartwright @Eli

    It may not be perfect, but what a HUGE compositional difference!



  • @art-dud Wow, it looks GREAT!!



  • @eli THANK YOU ALL! This the first book I have written AND illustrated, so doing everything with little to no outside input from others can make you blind to some things. Especially since I am also working on client projects.


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