Fall contest - WIP (feedback requested)

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    @johanna-kim Hey All, would love to know which color thumbnail resonates the best for you. Thanks in advance for your feedback.

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    @johanna-kim Revisited my b/w sketch composition and made further changes. Here's the before (left) and after (right).

    The new version does the following:
    -combines the two big branches above to one branch to support the cat and simplify the composition a bit.
    -The cat's tail is less crooked, more soft looking to distinguish it from the branches.
    -The girls are engaging with each other now.
    -The central falling leaves have been replaced with leaves on the sides so that the boy is more clearly gazing at the cat and not at the falling leaves.


  • @johanna-kim Great work on this Johanna, you chose the concept I would have probably voted for if I was earlier 🙂

    I know time is running out, but I think the viewpoint and composition can be improved upon. The topic of your scene is about being guided to a destination and to me it feels like you need a composition that can do that.

    As I see it, the angle of the branch with the cat on is cutting the composition diagonally in quite a straight and 50/50 cut, making the viewer's eye go from the top right to bottom left. The upper half of the triangle is quite empty so everything of importance is along that diagonal or in the bottom right and they are all wanting my attention. Instead of my eyes being guided I feel like that are being pulled by each object you have in the scene (I've numbered the things that I begin to focus on) and the bullseye doesn't feel such an important part of the scene, whereas it should probably be one of the leading parts.

    I hope you don't mind by I did a quick sketch over for how I would tackle this scene (i'm not saying it's the right way, but just another way to look at it. With this composition, the angle of the cat and the branch is suppose to guide us to the stack of leaves and the children and placed around it emphasis the target in the middle. My look at it is far from perfect, but I hope it can be of some help


  • For color I like A - the blue really makes the orange of fall POP! I think it'll work too if you move forward with @Gary-Wilkinson 's suggestion.
    You are just zooming through this!

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    @johanna-kim I like color A.

  • @johanna-kim I like color A!

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    @gary-wilkinson Thanks so much for your notes and drawover regarding composition. I always learn so much from your feedback and totally see what you mean. The reason I kept the upper half empty was because I was pretending that this would be a cover for a magazine like Cricket or Spider. However, I love the fix that you've presented and will definitely re-work it. Again, I feel a bit like I'm cheating by using your composition solution, but hopefully, I'll be able to improve my composition for the next one.

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    @johanna-kim Thanks @lenwen @Chip-Valecek @kaitlinmakes for your color votes and sticking with me through this process. This last minute submission is going to be a rush job, but I figured that I can sleep in October. (Oh wait, I'm doing Inktober! Ack.)

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    @johanna-kim Here's the latest composition fix (quite rough, but I can read it:). Running out of time, so jumping into the final drawing stage.

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    @johanna-kim Drawing on watercolor paper. Done. Feedback is welcome and appreciated at any stage of this process.

    I drew a ton of leaves, and then realized that they messed with my values too much and I'd have to end up re-drawing them again, which would be painful. I know there's a way to suggest a lot of leaves, but I actually enjoy drawing each one. That said, my goal is to achieve something in the middle, and let the paint suggest most of the leaves. This is the point, the painting stage, where I make every possible excuse not to start. Like that fact that I haven't eaten lunch yet... <stomach grumbles>

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    @johanna-kim Here's the painting (watercolor/digital). I'm going to step away for a few hours and see if there are any glaring issues. As always, any feedback from fresh eyes are welcome.


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    @johanna-kim That is so beautiful! I love the softness in you watercolors, really well done!
    I don't know how much you can change at this point, but the only things I can see are

    • I may have gone darker on the cat, really separate him from the background
    • I may have put one of the leaves closer to the boy who has his arms open to catch leaves

    But as you can see those are subjective things! It's already a great painting!

  • Oh wow! This turned out quite nice!

    I dunno if you're working digitally or traditionally, but putting some sun-dappled shade on the boy in the lower right might make hime feel more in-place. It looks like he's standing in the shade of the tree, but is lit from somewhere off camera at the moment.

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    @art-of-b Thanks for your observation and suggestion. I had the same thought (how to anchor this boy in place better?) but hadn't thought of adding the sun-dappled shade on him. I think I was worried he'd be less visible but perhaps he's too visible right now. I'll make the change (I can edit digitally) and resubmit. This illustration has been quite a challenge for me.

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    @nessillustration Thanks so much for your nice comments and suggestions. I'll will revisit my piece and see if I can improve it before the deadline. Hope folks don't mind that I've been revising my piece after submitting it to the contest thread.

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