Music WIP: Comments Appreciated

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    Thank you for all of the advice!
    @chrisaakins I'm glad you liked the circles cuz I added more. Lol.
    Here are two more versions. We'll call them 2 and 3.0_1534287277023_Music 2.jpg 0_1534287315212_Music 3.jpg
    After seeing them together like this I'm going to add another balloon to both. One above the horn blowing bear. So the design gets larger as it goes back(towards the left side).

  • @burvantill I love the bottom one! The top one is odd with the characters competing with the drums.

  • I agree about the two large circles competing in the latest versions, but I like the two left characters in the top one because I feel like they're having a moment. It depends on what you want to emphasize though. I'm also wondering about adding some opportunity for depth with some different angles, opposed to everything in profile. I can see this happening on my street with the neighborhood kids, so that cute factor is spot on.

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    @chrisaakins & @Laurel-Aylesworth , The circle next to the girl and otter is a hula hoop. She’s shaking because it makes a SHH SHH sound😊. Is that not registering? I may have to change that 🤔

  • @burvantill said in Music WIP: Comments Appreciated:

    The circle next to the girl and otter is a hula hoop. Is that not registering?

    I think it will when you add color.

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    @eli 👍That’s what I thought at first too but I’m wondering though. I’m going to leave the background white so maybe it will still be lost. I’m going stare at it and see if it changes. 😜😂

  • @burvantill, To be honest, I didn't see that until I looked at it on my laptop. Maybe turn it so that it is more of an ellipse?

  • @burvantill I thought it was a bass drum for a couple seconds, but then I saw the hula hoop. Great idea there.

  • It took me a moment, but the hula hoop indeed registers as a hula hoop. Like others have said once colour is added it should pop more.

    Overall I think it's much improved from the initial sketch. The raccoon with the bass drum and the second bear in the background with the snare have some real nice movement to them.

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    Thank you all so much for your critiques. They are definitely helping. I am now on to the next stage of Lee White's recommended process, Value. I did several value sketches and they are all slightly different. Let me have it. I will not cry and I won't get mad. I am ready for it. I have a favorite but I'm not saying in case it totally bad. LOL. PS. this is my first time doing value sketches like this so its possible I'm doing it wrong.

  • This is coming along nicely!

    My vote's for numbers two or three.

    Remember that you're trying to make it so that everything reads with value alone. So if you have two figures with the same value overlapping each other I'd think about changing it (#3: the rabbit sax, girl and hoop all have the same value and overlap).

    Imagine you only have black and white tiles and you can't have a white next to a black. Light on dark on light on dark on light, etc.

    I would also hunt for tangents before you go much further.

    Great work so far!

  • SVS Team SVS OG

    @burvantill I like numbers 2 or 5. I would say you are doing it right. There are a few different ways about doing it. Every artist has their way and no way is wrong. What ever works best in your process is the right way. I have done values then color and I have done local color with out values first. Usually when I go with local color first and then check values while I work my piece looks better. When I do values first and then add color it gets muddy. But that is just my opinion.

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    Okay, I looked at your favorites and blended what I thought were their best parts. These are my color sketches. They are almost the same , the raccoons drum was bugging me so I messed with it. Looking at this, there is no real focal point, at first I thought that would be bad, but since the idea was chaotic fun I thought again. I'm going to take @chrisaakins advice and add some nature confetti falling all around them to add more chaos. Anyway, here is my color scheme. Let me know what you think. 😬
    .ps. Thanx for the tip on tangents. I have many to remove in my final piece. Lol! FYI, am using a tip that Lee White talked about in one of the podcasts, flipping the art. Doing that really makes the mistakes pop out. You just look at something so much you can't see them without a new perspective. Totally works.👍

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  • SVS OG

    I like how this is developing; it’s a great picture. Of the two that you just posted, the first one read more easily when I was looking at it on my phone because the contrast was slightly higher than the second. Can’t wait to see the finished piece!

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    After a night away from these last pics all I see are balloons. Lol. I’m going to tone those waaaay down. Put some brighter colors in to the crowd.

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    Okay, here is my latest version next to one from above.
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  • @burvantill I love it! I assume you are going to saturate your colors more? I think the eyes of the critter with the bat call my attention as a focal point. I think it is a wonderful composition, I can't wait to see the finished project.

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    @chrisaakins thanx! That’s good to know about what you see as the focal point. I’ve stared at it too long it’s hard to tell. 🤪

  • Pro SVS OG

    Love the concept. I think you need to vary your sizes more and create more of a fore middle and background. I love your line work.

  • Pro SVS OG

    Sorry I posted after just looking at the sketch. As I scrolled down I see you have done that in you finals. Look very nice!

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