Critique for #draw50things

  • Hi Sheri--cool illustration! Love the concept, probably because I have dog like that. He's old now, but in his day was a champion countertop surfer! I think as far as wonkiness goes, it's great if it looks intentional and is part of the style of the piece. In that case, I'd go with it and exaggerate it a lot more...

  • @eli Hi Eli Thanks so much! Haha i'll bet, if my two are anything to go by. Nothing is safe, you have to keep a very close eye on your dinner.. blink and its gone πŸ˜ƒ I shall embrace the wonkiness!

  • @sheri_p79 0_1527097086330_notes.jpg

    I know what I did is rough but you seem to have a lot of perspective points but these objects are fixed

  • @rcartwright thank you so much for taking the time to do that, Its really helped!

  • @sheri_p79 great idea & lovely drawing, I love the dog! I wonder what it would look like if the dog was a little bigger/closer to us? I like the cat hiding behind the sofa too!

    I don’t know if it’s just me, but my eyes keep shooting off along the parallel lines of the cupboards. I wonder if something to the right of the foreground could break up those lines a little. Maybe if the ball was a little bigger?


  • @rachy Hi Rachel , thank you! I quickly tried that and it really helps make it clear that is the focal area πŸ˜ƒ I see what you mean about the cupboards it needs something to frame it in - if i can figure out the perspective for the overflowing trash can Chip suggested that may work.

  • I've had a go a reworking it and started laying in some local colours - tried to push the height of the breakfast bar as much as i could without having to redraw the whole thing -its still very messy I know, but has it improved the perspective issues?

    ps. I will be colouring the dog in, he's not a ghost! πŸ˜ƒ alt text

  • SVS Team SVS OG

    @sheri_p79 I think its looking great!

  • @chip-valecek Thanks Chip, I wish I'd asked you guys earlier, would have saved me a few redraws πŸ™‚

  • Hi All this is where I've gotten too, is it portfolio ready or does it need more work?

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  • SVS OG

    @sheri_p79 I like the piece and maybe a few more finishing touches could really set it off. Two things really stand out to me. The perspective is still off between the counter under the turkey and the doorway. Though the value hides it a little I can't un-see it now because they're so close to the focal area and directly between the turkey and dog. The other would be a suggestion to darken the value of the room behind the dog to create more contrast. One other suggestion would be to gradually darken the values on the left side of the image even more just to emphasize the focal point a little more. Having said all of that I like how you rendered the floor and cabinets. I tried something similar a while back and really struggled with it.

  • @jon-anderson Hi Jon thanks so much for your critiques, What has been seen cannot be unseen! Yep I got caught half way between pushing the perspective for a sense of chaos and also to give plausibility to the grappling hook and trying to follow the perspective with a bit of a "meh" result. I guess knowing what to push will come with experience. I should have picked a less awkward view until I had a lot more practice with perspective!

    I'll have another pass at it, thanks again.

  • @jon-anderson I've taken another pass with your critique in mind, i still have to fix the rendering but i think its helped - I've been staring at it so long i cant tell any more! alt text

  • SVS OG

    @sheri_p79 That's much better! It was a very subtle thing but you've managed well I think.

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